hybrid chatter

endless, talk too damn much...you just want to yell, "shut up!"...

hybrid chatter

 

voices cut and loudly clatter

               through the maze of

chatter present…incessant.

               a strange human talks…AT ME…

while walking, bent…why should this

               matter?

the noise crashes my past,

               clashes with alone time…

my only own time;

               now it really shatters!

sane forgiveness, lifeless

               business rambling past

familiar home…begging for a voice

               award…while sighting the

door I walk toward.

               chatter masks its VIOLENT clatter…

door slams closed;

               the porch light

splatters…home is

               my own alone…

no chatter.

 

dan © 2015

 

 

Music: "Thunder Clatter," by Wild Cub

              

Author's Note

Reviews

[Nisreen]

We sometimes experience this social overload
and i would say i fall sometimes into the chattering type
until we got that alone time
and find solace ...... i enjoyed this write

you deliver the feel of frustration so well !!!

[dan]

Thank you so much. This one was sort of autobiographical. Bipolar and anxiety disorders ring harsh chimes inside my head to go with the ones in my ears. Frustration is a byproduct of both. I appreciate your kind words. take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

hmm. Reminds me of a song I love. I'd share, but it's not in English. anyways..brings that feeling ...When you jus have enough of the talk, and want silence. Then, you get silence, but it's not exactly what you've expected, and now you wish for sounds again. Or you got it from some event, that wasn't supposed to happen ...Like a loved one leaving ...So the space makes no sense, and it keeps being an obstacle.. silence. it's loud...burning
.so you wish for sounds .. Or in this case...Chatter. anyway, that's all I got from it. well done

[dan]

This was a very good reading done by you, hitting on almost all of the points I was trying to emphasize when I wrote it. Something about the sizeable difference between sound and chatter (and clatter). Thank you for the great read/review. take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

my pleasure :)

[Tks]

The first thing that got to me was the form of the poetry, Dan. Very unique indeed, it seems that these are drifting thoughts, part of the endless "chatter". What I really liked most was about how now it "shatters", and that is the truly gorgeous part about your writing: it is universal. Silence means multiple different things for us, and you really added a touch of brilliance when you didnt commit yourself to any particular tone. An insightful read, Dan! As always, keep 'em coming
P.S. loving that hair mate! ;)

[dan]

I actually tried to write it so it would have that feel to it, that mindless chatter. What I wanted to imply was that if we think about how much actual useful information is not heard due to the noise. As technology continues to accelerate my attention span grows smaller, so I depend on written message or talking to someone, which I imagine by now has been given the name "face mail." As for my hair, it is what it is. It's just hair, not a symbol of something else. I'm thinking or growing my ponytail again...or not. Is it too long for a guy my age? Thanks for the visit and review. take care...dan

[B]

Some voices are simply meant to be shut off
Some are vile
unkind and mean

To preserve sanity and love within
we shut that door

Bravo

[dan]

Thank you...Nisreen?? Did you trim you name down a syllable to confuse us? Well, we can tell from the tone and quality of your writes and reviews that it's still our lovable Nisreen(aa). Thank you for your intuitive review. take care...dan

[B]

My name is Nisreen Al Alamy
The two aa were a simple abbreviation
so i just placed my first name
Thank you Dan

[dan]

Your name is beautiful, almost lyrical in and of itself. take care...dan

[B]

It means a flower

[Kaylee April]

This is great. I love how there are little sparks of rhyming and how you you gave it a lot of sound. It brings forward a lot of emotion.

[dan]

I tried to imbue the write with a beat not unlike the accompanying music's rhythm. The irregular rhyme scheme is a device I use quite often. Thank you very much for your read/review. take care...dan

[-Scribe in Style-]

Lot's of sounds and rhythm that gives it a good pace and adds effect to the structure.
Great piece. Triggers many connotations.
A

[dan]

A, thank you for the insightful review...it was meant to touch the reader and trip them into their own inner clatter and hum. take care...dan

[Aphy!]

The structure is good! And i really enjoyed it...made me think about a lot of things

[dan]

Thanks so much, I really appreciate you stopping by and doing the read/review. take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

I think being alone with yourself makes for good company. We need the peace and solitude it offers. Remember when you were a teenager, and your parents went out without you...you had the whole house to yourself! Man, what a feeling THAT was...no chatter!

Good one, Dan...

[dan]

A perfect analogy that I hadn't thought of! Thanks for adding that little nugget to the thought process that led me to write this. An always-astute review, as is your norm. Thanks so much, Kelly. take care...dan

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

I love that silent when you get home and are alone with your own thoughts. I can totally relate to this piece and enjoyed the word choice. Awesome per usual

[dan]

Yes, when I walk in the door the first sound that greets me is our conure yelling (a bird) and that spells 'home' to me. Thank you for your kind words...as per usual too! take care...dan

[jeannemarie coulter]

as usual a well penned word tapestry...could feel the chatterclatter driving the words

[dan]

Thank you so much. I opened my mind and this just sort of fell out onto the keyboard. Empty and silent mind-chatter? Who knows. take care...dan