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a dip into surrealism

defining life:

it’s like riding a bike (but the tires go flat),

maybe you can’t forget, oh--

but can you adapt?

 

sugarcoat the impossible,

look back into your darkest fears;

but just like the sun

you mustn’t stare.

 

our star bids a grand goodnight

drenched in a spectrum of clouds...

so when does this dream

wash up on the shining

beach??

                  and where??

 

dan © 2015

Music: "Guitar Etude No. 3," by Dan Fogelberg and Tim Weisberg

Author's Note

Reviews

[MsJewel]

Love your use of metaphor in this wonderful little gem - and the music you chose is perfect for the tone of your words.

:) Julie

[dan]

Julie, I scribbled some words in a whimsically organized pattern and thought of only one song with which to complete it. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

...this one has a mesmerizing effect, Dan. I was swaying to the music, then totally absorbed in the "surrealism" of your muse.

I never knew of this collaboration!

[dan]

I was feeling kind of ethereal when I wrote these words and could not think of a better song to use as accompaniment. The name of the album by Fogelberg and Weisberg was "Twin Sons of Different Mothers." Whole CD is beautiful. They do a cover of the old song, "Tell Me To My Face" that is enchanting. YouTube it, it's great. take care...dan

[Indra Neil]

a thought provoking write with brilliant metaphors! well done! :)

[dan]

thank you, sir. dan

[Indra Neil]

You are welcome!

[mattavelli]

These were interesting thoughts, Dan. I enjoyed the read.

[dan]

thx a lot for the read/review...dan

[....................]

Dan, I really enjoyed this piece...from the wisdom in the first stanza of moving forward in life, having to adapt because life changes something or takes something away...through the middle stanza where we can sugar coat all the crap as long as we don't spend too much time staring at it...to the final stanza where one longs for the dream to end...if surrealism was your goal then you have nailed it...great pic and love the music!

[dan]

FT, Thank you. Surreal seems to be my current milieu in life, so why not write what I currently know? I love your interpretation of the piece, pretty much dead on how this idea was put on paper. Thank you for your continued support and friendship! take care...dan

[....................]

Always my pleasure, Dan...I am a fan of your work and am enjoying this friendship. Cheers, my friend!

[AaronFreitas]

"it’s like riding a bike (but the tires go flat),
maybe you can’t forget, oh--
but can you adapt?"
Man you hit the nail on the head with those lines... awesome write and some deep thoughtful truth about life. I loved it Dan!

[dan]

Aaron, Thanks so much for your kind review. I always appreciate your feedback. take care...dan

[Cladine]

You're poem hits me. This one sure is strong. I like the second stanza :) great write. :)

[dan]

Cladine, Thank you so much for your encouraging review. I appreciate your feedback and look forward to reading more of your work. Don't forget to send me read requests? take care...dan

[Cladine]

aw ,thank you :)

[Riv]

I really love this poem, and the music caught me by surprise at first xD Pen on!

[dan]

Thanks very much. An instrumental number seemed to fit best with the tone of the write. Thank you for the review. take care...dan

[Not here]

i like this dan :) good jub

[dan]

Thank you for the read and review, I appreciate the combo. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really good piece...from tribulations of the past, we must learn and then keep riding the bike forward...if we stare too long into the darkness, into what we fear, we will be frozen by the heat of the memories.

j.

[dan]

jacob, Thanks so much for the intuitive review. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed any of yours lately but will rectify that; a lot of health issues going on, tired of them. Thanks again, always honored by your reviewing my work. take care....dan