When the Crowd Awoke

Don't you just hate it when the attending crowd is just not paying attention? Yeah, me neither. But really, don't you just want to slap one in the back of the head? No? Aww, you're no fun.....

I undress myself slowly (my eyes not accustomed)

The rain blowing, shrieking and tossing the leaves…

If leaves fall in summer is the pumpkin far behind?

Or a sign of danger hiding underneath the

Fallen leaves?

 

So why am I undressed (a reminiscence of the past?)

To test the limits of my acquiescence bordering on sane?

And tattooing scales of thorns to be displayed?

I’ve made my own decisions until now…

So can I dissolve the mist around the lamplight

Circling my fears

And put my f*****g clothes on till the carnage

Disappears?

 

As I explain the last two verses and the cloudiness within

I am tempted to reveal it’s all a joke.

But I hate to tell you and misguide you…

My whole world has turned a blind eye

To the spot where all the characters, the actors,

Read their scripts and the play begins.

(and then the crowd awoke).

 

dan © 2015

 

Music: “The Sound of the Crowd,” by Human League

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Raveness]

This poem spoke to me. You could truly feel the raw emotion and fear that comes with exposing yourself whether it be physically or emotionally

[dan]

Raveness, I like your interpretation of the write. Thank you very much for the read/review. take care...dan

[Raveness]

No problem. If you would, please review my poem Angel Rays

[dan]

I'll go to your page and look for it but in the future could you send read requests? Do you know how to do that? If you are at the page your poem is posted on you'll see a little box, top right of page. Click on where it says something like 'read request' or something close to that. There will pop up another window that lists all of your friends in alphabetical order; you just check the boxes of all friends you wish to send the RR to. Then hit send. In the meantime I'm heading for your page to look for "Angel Rays." take care...dan

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the way you twist the language.
"So why am I undressed (a reminiscence of the past?)
To test the limits of my acquiescence bordering on sane?
And tattooing scales of thorns to be displayed?"
Each set of lines create thoughts and visions. Your poetry make the reader fall into places and thoughts. The above lines stood out. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[dan]

Thank you for thinking the writing is outstanding. That's actually better than I thought it to be. 8^) take care...dan

[Coyote Poetry]

Good energy in the words and you are welcome.

[-Scribe in Style-]

Uncovering is such a private yet passionate thing, a nakedness that we can't help but feel intrigued towards but then we turn the blind eye of ignorance and we we didn't know the truth.

[dan]

I like your interpretation of the write; the feeling of being naked with clothes on is a juxtaposition that our minds launch us into when panicked or intimidated. The key lies in the intensity of the fight to maintain the peace within one's self. Fight for peace? Ironic, how nice? take care...dan

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

Dan,

This first thing that comes to mind is with nakedness is the insecurity we all face, the fear and inadequacies we all feel. I loved that it was so complex and tangled, loved the fall theme. I think we can all pull out what we need. Thank you for such a great write

[Alfred Kukitz]

Ideas that tease me into reading more, read again, finally waking from my own slumber.

regards,
al

[dan]

Thanks so much for the read/review. I am happy that it made you wish to read more; isn't that the point? Thanks again. take care...dan

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

A thought provoking write!

[dan]

Jane, Thanks so much for your read and review, for the kind words contained within. Whenever I get a review from someone new I always head over to their page to reciprocate. So here I go! Thanks again...dan

[A writer]

Whats with the stuff in the description? Why would someone want to hit someone else, without any reason? I don't get it lol.

[dan]

The comment about hitting someone who's not paying attention in the back of the head is meant to be a bit of satirical humor. I'm sorry if it offended you. take care...dan

[A writer]

Nah... Don't worry about it, I just did not get it right away. Sorry. Nice poem.

[dan]

Thank you...dan

[jeannemarie coulter]

a fine orchestration of a word dance to make the reader respond by thinking and questioning...well done, dan...

[dan]

My goal in the writings I choose to share is to awaken thoughts within each reader, enabling them to have a look beneath the surface of the writing. Thanks so much for your review. take care....dan

[Robert]

Great write Dan and enjoyed the word play in this piece you have written. You had me thinking on this one from the beginning to the end and had me intrigued on the hidden message you were revealing.

[dan]

Robert, Yeah I kind of wrote this one for myself only, then decided to post it at the last minute. When the idea hit me it was like pulling a Band-Aid off a cut: like THAT! It's about a personal thing
in my life, written in the manner of an inside joke. Thanks for the read/review! take care...dan

[JayceeC]

Oh in some ways you could call this one big nudist colony, at WC. Your audience may appear clothed, but that's really only a bathrobe the fair wearing. We put them on simply to watch others perform, and then we take them off when it's our turn.

[dan]

How Adam and Eve-ish. Although I was fully clothed when I wrote this I like your spin on it. It actually adds a bit more mystery than I even intended. Thank you for your keen insights. take care...dan

[JayceeC]

Lol..those were metaphorical robes of the soul. If anyone is writing in the nude, we good for them, but not sure I want that image stuck in my head...lol

[dan]

Oh, I caught your use of the metaphor, I was just taking my turn and playing around with it. Thanks again...dan