I'm Trying

desperately wishing for those sounds to stop

I try to make my world believe

That tragedy is normalcy,

I’ve tried to make my inside voices

Sing in five-part harmony;

I’ve tried so hard to move the middle,

Placing it on top,

I’ve tried ignoring all of the noise,

I’ve tried to make it stop.

 

I place awnings over sandboxes to

Keep our children dry,

I try to keep their worlds safe as

They’re leaping toward the sky;

I try to spin my fears around

And harbor them within,

I’m trying to improve my mind,

I’m trying to begin.

 

dan © 2015

 

Music: “Hey You,” by Pink Floyd

Author's Note

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am trying to begin.....
if we all did that...the world would begin to become safe.
not enough care.

love this piece....a cry for peace and caring.

[dan]

jacob, peace now and in the future for our children's children. A high hope to be sure, but genuine nonetheless. Thanks for your feedback as always! take care...dan

[GreenEyedPoet]

Trying to improve ones mind, to quiet our inner demons - not an easy task! I've been working on that lately too. And though it may be hard, it's great that you trying to change things and make them better. At the end of the day all that matters is that you tried. Well written piece Dan. :]

[dan]

Too bad that try does not always equal succeed, but that is the story of life in the big city I guess. take care...dan

[GreenEyedPoet]

May not equal success but as long as you're trying that is never a fail, least in my opinion. You've only failed if you give up [or I guess never try at all].

[Melinda McQueen]

Dan, I not only like the message but how it effortlessly flowed. It speaks of how we all need and long for inner peace.
Well done.

[dan]

Not only to avoid the inner workings of external turmoil but to be vigilant in protecting future generations from darkness. Thanks so much for your interpretation. take care...dan

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Wow, Dan, what a fantastic write... negotiating with those voices to come to terms with tragedy; trying desperately to orchestrate their harmony (as each voice conflicts with the other); attempting to raise the voice of reason above the rest... fantastic

and then, that awning: trying to keep children from growing up so they don't have to experience the realities of the world around us; from the tears shed daily around the globe...

This is one of my favorites of yours, Dan... well-done!

[dan]

The idea for this one came quickly and was written quickly...but then the revisions began, until I was finally satisfied with what I was trying to say. Your interpretation as always was almost exactly what I wanted the voice to sound like. Thank you so much. take care...dan

[Confuser]

Dan: Love it....that first stanza is beautiful and speaks volumes; all that annoying stuff, the wrongs, the thoughts over stupid things, but the hurts, equating anxieties: No peace. Same great writing in stanza two; lovely writing, and I can certainly relate, so can many others. Great work! Thank you...Dale

[dan]

It's like we were both viewing this idea through the same lens. I can only write words, it is up to the reader to imbue those words with meaning, what it says to them; you've done that very well. Thank YOU. take care...dan

[Confuser]

My pleasure...& you're welcome too...take care!

[mattavelli]

Hi, Dan. This was a great one to read. It rhymes and flows nicely. Thanks for sharing.

[dan]

I always appreciate feedback, yours is always helpful in determining how the piece is received. Thank you. take care...dan