I Remember

Thoughts flying around...I tried to bat them down but had to quit to watch Judge Judy.

A spark within my memory follows me

To the place I go to

Hear the shallow whispers in the wind.

 

I remember shadow voices calling me

As I passed through darkened

Woodlands on the way to learn my fate.

 

Please stop the sirens ringing after me,

Let me move on unencumbered

By the tragedies within.

 

I hope and pray that God is listening

To my prayers punctuated

By the dreams that I begin.

 

I remember…

 

dan © 2015

 

Music: “One Stage Before,” by Al Stewart

Author's Note

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This is a compelling piece in its angst and the music is so apt Dan!

[dan]

Thanks so much, John, I'm happy that you enjoyed it! take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your last verse makes such an indelible impression, Dan.

[dan]

Thank you Kelly. I just noticed something; I'm about to post a new piece called "I'm Trying," in which the final word of the write is "begin," just like this one. Odd. Thank you for the kind words. take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

...we do amazes ourselves from time to time, don't we?

[jeannemarie coulter]

i enjoy your use of music to draw us along in your word tapestries...you draw our memories from the deep dark and allow us to experience the past again...well penned and thank you

[dan]

Music has been such an integral part of my life, I wouldn't feel write posting something WITHOUT an accompanying song. I am so glad you enjoyed the write AND the music, thank you. take care...dan

[B]

Dan a very spiritual piece of sublime art
That moment of sweet escape and finding true belief inside the soul
Recalling moments and being in peace
through any trouble

It is our decorum of how we pass through life that matters the most ...... To not allow the soul to escape our body
To be in this beautiful picture you drew
A serenity

Your words are wise
And this poem touched the soul

[dan]

Wow, I did all THAT? Your feedback is always appreciated, your flattery gives my day a kick-start. The truth is that none of my writing works unless the reader interprets them in such a way for thoughts, not messages, to hit home with them. I just try to plant seeds...the reader does the rest. Thank you, and take care...dan

[mattavelli]

Are you remembering some fears here, Dan?

[dan]

I remember fears and cheers and Cavaliers. And at my age I remember a helluva lot more memories than you could hope to. That is neither good nor bad, just numbers. Thank you for the read/review. take care...dan

[Confuser]

Dan: A beautiful journey you have written, the plea for peace, is what I hear, the life we all wish, but get glimpses of in memories, or just beyond our reach. I remember, and it all is gorgeous. I want you to get those dreams, capture them, and encapsulate all the wonderful memories, and forget the ones that haunt us all. Loved this one. Thank you so very much! Dale

[dan]

Memories and the dreams that go hand-in-hand with them can sometimes take us anywhere we'd like to go. Kind of like a magic car that requires no gas in the tank. I enjoyed your interpretation of the piece, thank you. take care...dan

[Confuser]

Dan, you are a very talented writer. FACT!!! I love too your response, and I miss dreams, to me there not real - I have to take medications to sleep. I've had chronic insomnia for so long; I miss the real ones...I rewrote that poem!!! Mainly because of you...I like it better, but I cannot, and never will be able to write like you and so many others, but that okay too. Hope you & Dee have great weekend, and pray things are going better with the other situation.

[dan]

Dale, A few other FACTS: I take 12 different meds for my various disorders, and I can't sleep a good sleep. I wake up 6 or 7 times a night from VIVID AND DISTURBING dreams. And I never suggested you rewrite Moonbow...I just had a little fun with the name because I wasn't aware that it was a real phenomenon. And I can make the argument that you write AT LEAST AS GOOD as me, we just have different styles and muses. I really wish you would stop selling yourself short as a writer. You've written some STAGGERINGLY GOOD pieces; I write a few great ones but most are fairly average and pedestrian. I can think of about 20 OF MY FRIENDS who are better than I am, and you're included in that group. Give yourself some credit, please; I mean, modesty is fine but self-recognition is also fine if one is not always bragging on themselves. I love reviewing your poems because they provide so many nuances to explore and absorb. Say this to yourself now: I AM A GOOD WRITER! Rinse. Repeat. take care...dan

[Confuser]

Wow: Dan my concentration is so terrible right now I had to unplug the earphones; First thought was OMG, how terrible Dan. To wake up with a bad dream; I only remember one, and it haunted me; someone killed my son. Next, I'm so sorry if you thought I rewrote that poem because of you. I have a sense of humour, I see I must be careful with. I was disappointed because I knew I could do better. Now that being said: you are so very nice, so kind. My self-esteem has truly most of my life been in the gutter; I'm so hyper and have to take medication too, but nothing seems to help. Sometimes, like now, just told someone, I can concentrate better, slow down and write better. I will say this, A couple of times, I have read, and re-read a poem of mine, and finally came to the conclusion it's okay. FOR ME, IT'S A MIRACLE. Remember Tom Petty, even a loser gets lucky sometimes. Now, I don't EVER exspect people do pick me up...whatever. I'm fine: Now that's enough, I'll say to myself just what you've said. But at the same time, I see things in your work that absolutely blow me away. Truly. I have came to a couple of your poems and have been awestruck. I really didn't know how to review. Anyway, thanks, and no, I just impulsively loaded the poem, and knew I could do better. Know I can now, but got other things to do. Not that important. You're sweet. I am sorry If I every offended you: I respect you. Thanks!!!!

[dan]

You have never offended me, don't know why you would even think that as possible. NOW, that Tom Petty song....."Even the Losers," from his seminal album "Damn the Torpedoes." Wow. Best song on that album, IMO? "Louisiana Rain." YouTube it if you must, GOTTA hear that song. take care and have a great weekend! see ya....dan

[Confuser]

I actually had the cassette...his production team follows me on twitter. I've seen him twice. I will listen again to Louisiana Rain. You got me back to Stevie: Listened again to Rhianna, and Sara, so many wonderful songs....Thanks Dan and you take care.

[....................]

when those memories we try so hard to bury, finally surface we can do not but follow... and as we move forward toward it, we hope and pray the tragedies we've buried along the way allow us to pass by without forcing us to relive them... love the dream-like feel to this, Dan.

[dan]

A very nice and neat insight into the secrets of the mind. Very well said. Thank you for that. take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

I love the wording Dan... definitely a dark image you provide but beautiful at the same time. I loved it!

[dan]

Thank you Aaron. I always appreciate the feedback. take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Nice poem, I really like it.

[dan]

Thank you for the kind words and the read/review. take care...dan