A Love Forbidden

to love a married man? scandalous love triangle? let's write a poem....

Scrambling through all dusky thought

The motion of a stealthy love

Darting in and out and fraught

With doubt,

A headstone on the plot of pain.

 

Desire seldom follows rules as it

Skirts the outer brink of truth,

One’s youth may seem to excuse

The brashest passion,

The fervent hopes resounding with

The hollowed call of propriety

In need.

 

The obvious facts are brushed away,

The forensic traces of troubled truth

Can cloud all judgment, an ethical question

Cluttered by the hope of youth.

The wrong seems right

With signals crossed.

 

dan © 2015

 

Music: “Happy Home,” by Antigone Rising

Author's Note

Reviews

[sereenaoutloud]

"That moral compass that some just do not have at all or it is very unbalanced!!
Love- oh how it can make us do foolish things and make a fool of us too!
Penned perfectly Dan and love the song too!

[dan]

A forbidden love almost always leads to heartbreak, but I just related to Ana Sophia I wrote a line in a poem once that stated, "The heart that has never been broken has never been touched," When one looks at love objectively one must consider the risk/reward aspect, and the reward is ALWAYS worth the risk. Thank you for your intuitive review. take care...dan

[sereenaoutloud]

so very true dan..someone always gets hurt in a forbidden love scenario....but yes what you just said reminds me of the saying "better to have loved and lost than to never have loved at all" (or something like that lol) :)

[Matching Socks]

Many a young girl has been lured into a relationship with an older married man, foolishly thinking it must be love. How many hearts are breaking right now I wonder?

I thought we had this code whereby we don't mess with another woman's man? Affairs seem selfish, no matter which side you're on. But I guess there are a lot of unhappy people in the world.

[dan]

I came up with a line in a poem once in which I said, "The heart that has never been broken has never been touched." Also experiencing heartbreak helps your appreciation when love really does find you. Thanks, as always, for your great feedback. take care...dan

[JayceeC]

Youth's passion knows no caution. That is a universal truth, but it does not account for leaving the morals of a lifetime behind, but we can understand it. Once past youth, there is little tolerance.

[dan]

Jaycee, I agree that youth can be forgiven a multitude of sins, the only problem being that some of those younger people become adults without acquiring the necessary moral compass needed. Then one can only hope that the resulting fallout does not rise to criminal heights. Thank you for the read/review. take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

"Desire seldom follows rules as it
Skirts the outer brink of truth,"

I really liked those lines... they really shined through in this awesome write! There is so much truth in those words. Great piece

[dan]

Aaron, Your reviews are always appreciated. Thank you again for your kind words. take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

We always want what we can't have, and what we have is supposed to be enough. But what happens when it's not? How can one person be everything that another needs?

You keep exceeding yourself with these introspective pieces, Dan!

[dan]

As you continuously exceed yourself with your intuitive reviews. I'm always appreciative of your point of view, Kelly, thank you. take care...dan

[fattycbreezy52]

The title just sums up everything. Love is a basic emotion but what if that one particular thing you need the most is tagged forbidden?
This is just amazing. Very gripping.
Amazing use of words:)

[dan]

fcb, Thank you so much for the complimentary review, I'm so glad you liked the piece. Thanks for visiting my page! take care...dan

[....................]

As I read this, Dan, I cannot help but think that the heart only understands one rule and that is love... love is akin to the innocence of youth, when no wrong exists... love is a sudden instinctive push or pull... it is gravity... societal and ethical norms decide what is right and wrong - what is forbidden a- and our learned selves practice thus, feeling the burdens of that out of reach love...

Your piece opens starkly but beautifully: forbidden love is buried in that painful plot... the second stanza is even more spot on: desires certainly do ignore societal and ethical norms - they burn and the only way to quell them is to give in... and that final stanza is heart-breaking but reality for most of us: we know the facts but we commit the wrong, when it feels right, and those lines continue to tangle...

There is one thing for certain, Dan, there is no doubt in your writing and your pen is a stealthy as this forbidden love you write about... well-done!

[dan]

FT, Thank you, I was trying hard not to suggest the most taboo of entanglements but there are many relationships that ignore any type of moral compass and all ethical norms are set aside for the stealth of moments crowded with impropriety. I don't quite know what prompted me to write about this but it seemed important at the time to pay attention to an all-too-common dilemma. Thanks so much for your (right on schedule) intuitive review. take care...dan

[ANTO]

I really like the vocabulary that you chose to use here Dan.
Words like 'propriety' -
Phrases like 'dusky thought' (brilliant) and 'stealthy love' (ditto)

While the writer's stall is set out clearly there is also threads of understanding - 'brashest passion' and 'fervent...youth'
Thats how you do it. well penned Dan

[dan]

ANTO, I value your reviews as much as any other WC writer, and I thank you for your kind words. I just reviewed your graphic art presentation and it's stunning. I've still got it on my mind while I'm trying to compose this thank you. take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yeah...i know what its like to love someone you are "not supposed to" love. The love between my boy and me was and sadly still is forbidden. Great job my friend.

[dan]

IM, I don't know what you mean by "my boy and me," but unless you are talking about a child there is nothing forbidden about romantic love between two males. The world as a whole and American society has made great strides in acceptance and rightfully so. Thanks so much for your review. take care...dan

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome. And i use "my boy" instead of "my boyfriend" its shorter that way.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

By the way...he is the same age as me. So don't worry.