Hehehehe, now I jus had that moment of clarity... *smiles* I know, I've seen the title somewhere before... And now, I remembered. . Hahahahaha. Eight months ago, I've read this, and left a pitiful note, saying full rating, and that I love the included song (and I do.)
What I'd add... This reminds me of my nightmares... Well some of it actually.. I've got the hair standing on my head reaction... Which means, your poem jus scored full on drawing in readers, and also on the feel of it. Nice work.
I've got another dark one I would have submitted to the contest if I could have, called "bitter boy .. read moreI've got another dark one I would have submitted to the contest if I could have, called "bitter boy blue;" it's about the demons affecting a young boy who ends up jumping to his death. Very dark, a very unusual rhyme scheme. But I like the one I submitted too. Thanks for your kind words, I appreciate it. take care...dan
8 Years Ago
well, if you still want to submit it, then I'll edit the contest, and let everyone submit a second p.. read morewell, if you still want to submit it, then I'll edit the contest, and let everyone submit a second piece :)
I'll let you know when it's done :)
Brilliant as the first one, there were few times after finishing lines I was singing Enter Sandman and was singing 'Yeahhhh' like Hetfield.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
"Enter night, exit light. Take my hand off to Never-Never Land." After I wrote this sequel to the fi.. read more"Enter night, exit light. Take my hand off to Never-Never Land." After I wrote this sequel to the first I thought of 'Sandman' and why I HAD to use it as the backing music. Thank you for your kind words. take care...dan
I normally do not like really dark stuff, but you keep me engaged! thank you for the share
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I usually let my mood dictate the feel of my work as it hits the page. Writing darkly while feeling .. read moreI usually let my mood dictate the feel of my work as it hits the page. Writing darkly while feeling crappy is sometimes quite cathartic. Thank you for the read/review. take care...dan
You do darkness very well, Dan. I'd love to see you do something from Tool :) There's some deep s**t for you to dive in. This was awesome, my friend the poet :)))
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
lynn, I actually write the piece first then try to think of a song to accompany it, I don't write po.. read morelynn, I actually write the piece first then try to think of a song to accompany it, I don't write poems based on the songs. I'm also not much familiar with Tool, only remember a few of their songs. I may take this up as a challenge, though. Gimme some time, I'll see what I can come up with. Thanks so much for the read/review. take care...dan
Tee, Thank you, it's my pleasure to share when I receive such kind returns (and even when someone sa.. read moreTee, Thank you, it's my pleasure to share when I receive such kind returns (and even when someone says a piece sucks!) I love the feedback. take care...dan
The Specter loves a martyr, thriving on their innocence... and perhaps it is our own shortcomings as human beings that has created the Specter, and he is just a reflection of our hatred and abusively selfish natures... if you take all the inhuman activities being carried out in our world today it is easy to see how one could imagine such a creature... this is hauntingly dark, Dan, but I believe it is born out of something real... well-done, my friend... I look forward to Specter III - coming soon to a cafe near you!!!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
FT, You are right; I originally did not conceive the Specter as a finite entity but rather a feeling.. read moreFT, You are right; I originally did not conceive the Specter as a finite entity but rather a feeling, a foreboding presence. A compilation of all the ills of today's world? That's a wonderful way to interpret that. (I think I'll take credit for that...kidding) Your reviews always are so enlightening and hit so close to home, I value your feedback always. take care...dan
I won't curse at you if you don't curse at me *deal* ??
I loved this super archaic-flavoured, deliciously dark poem.
He's quite the character the Spector.
well penned Dan. yes sir, well penned indeed.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
ANTO, Thank you again. I think I will eventually have to do a 'Watch the Specter III' to complete th.. read moreANTO, Thank you again. I think I will eventually have to do a 'Watch the Specter III' to complete the trilogy, mostly because I LOVE the word trilogy. Always so nice to hear from you, my friend! take care...dan
First of all... I love that song!!! next... I like this poem. Rating 100#
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Again, thanks so much. I very much enjoy writing of the dark side; when younger I did so almost excl.. read moreAgain, thanks so much. I very much enjoy writing of the dark side; when younger I did so almost exclusively. And, of course, how could I go wrong with Enter Sandman? Thanks again. take care...dan
Excellent. Sort of reminds me of sympathy for the devil.
I'm looking over my shoulder now wondering if some being is just waiting to snatch my life and / or soul.
Creepy good.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Stay tuned some day for Watch the Specter III, the completion of the demonic trilogy. Now I just hav.. read moreStay tuned some day for Watch the Specter III, the completion of the demonic trilogy. Now I just have to write it, then find a suitable song to accompany it...hmm..."The Number of the Beast?" by Iron Maiden? Thank you for your great reviews and consistent support. take care...dan