chasing the better me

chasing the better me

A Poem by dan
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A re-post; originally posted my first day on WC, only once reviewed. this is an exercise in self-examination, seeking to better myself

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flying like madness and reaching for

avoidance, to be worn like lipstick masks.

shooing away the hate filled thoughts

(or maybe not).

a guidebook, filled with tear-soaked snapshots,

scraps of crowded imagery;

reminders of a shuttered past...

a fool’s errand?

that’s mine, and all messes made:

my toxic audacity, you know,

my majestic paradigm.

my curse.

 

well-intended passion plays

travel roads to thrones of fire and ice;

to be exacting and annoying?

it does seem  

to become me, if little else.

take pains to avoid all heartsick marathons,

pathways to pies in overblown skies; why then, why

is tenacity in such desperately short supply?

forge on? make dogged headway? nose to grindstone…??

yep, that’s the plan, mister; it’s not to be mocked, though,

as if by the comedian’s heckler.

 

repair too much and realize that such drastic

course corrections

often bend toward the pointless and rhetorical;

slipshod attempts to romanticize the irony

and to appear heroic, intrepid--

even gallant (with that pretentious french pronunciation) ---

yeah, all of that.

 

to find any manner of self

that embodies reformative, sensible ideals may be

too much of a fleeting concept,

requiring way too much humility and tact

to foster a glimpse of

“success is mine (or is it hope?)”

 

victory? a better me?

not quite. . . . no, not yet. . . .

perhaps, in time, i’ll be observant enough,

or at least be trying, to see ‘that’ self

in the distance.

              

dan © 2014


Music: "Netherlands," by Dan Fogelberg

© 2015 dan


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we hope experience makes a better us....and we think back on so many passion plays we directed in our lives, only to find fire and rain...and ? would frost again ask, which way would be better to die?

i guess either way, there are those of us who will die a poet's death....whatever that is.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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dan

9 Years Ago

jacob, For me this is like a carrot on a stick theme; I will never get to where I want to be because.. read more



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I really liked this poem.
"victory? a better me?
not quite. . . . no, not yet. . . .
perhaps, in time, i’ll be observant enough,
or at least be trying, to see ‘that’ self
in the distance."
I understand the above lines. You made me smile this afternoon. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Thank you, John for your kind words. This was a hopeful exercise in soul-searching and it really mad.. read more
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
usually i am not a fan of wordy poetry. I like concise and raw, unfiltered if you will. HOWEVER i really think you needed all that was presented in this. I feel as though it added to the flow and move of the piece and really created a stream of conscience vibe that i really liked.

I love pieces that move you to think about your own life and decisions.

Posted 9 Years Ago


dan

9 Years Ago

Crystal, Thank you. I chose to open myself up like a book in this piece, more of a self-exploration .. read more
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The battle of change

Of moving above obstacles with oneself and the world

Love it

So good

Posted 9 Years Ago


dan

9 Years Ago

Nisreenaa, Thank you for your kind words. Very much appreciated. take care...dan
I used to be able to write poems like this. Such amazing content and description...even the length. I can't seem to get myself back to that and I miss it. Very well done, though, Dan. I always love reading your work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


dan

9 Years Ago

River, Thanks so much. This piece that I wrote is so raw and unfiltered that it was as if I opened a.. read more
RiverRei

9 Years Ago

Wow thank you Dan, you're so sweet :) Take care!!!
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Dan,
sometimes the most difficult thing to do as a poet is to leave a poem just be.. we want it to be immaculate, or this and that.. IT wants to be itself, it wants to speak in hushed tones or loud screams as it pleases. :) Peace your mind! :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


dan

9 Years Ago

ms, Thank you, I intentionally wrote this piece in a conversational tone, I wanted it to appear raw .. read more
Having read your most recent work, I can definitely say there has been an evolution since this writing. This poem is less sculpted, less worked on, so much more raw and truthful!
The way the words are written and the questions asked reveals how unsure one can be when searching for his true self. You might get lost along the way but you'll eventually get there, bit by bit.

Posted 9 Years Ago


dan

9 Years Ago

Klare, I like your interpretation on this piece. It IS raw and truthful but the real truth is that I.. read more
klarity

9 Years Ago

Oh yes I never doubted that you had worked long and hard on it ! The result is exactly what you were.. read more
i like this poem, and i especially liked: victory? a better me?
not quite. . . . no, not yet. . . .
great write!

Posted 9 Years Ago


dan

9 Years Ago

Thank you, david. I do appreciate your read/review and your complimentary comments about the write. .. read more
Your poetry always has so much depth and raw honesty. Which is why I love your work so much.

You ask why there is a lack of tenacity while at the same time explaining the common place laziness of society as a whole. Finding the higher self requires too much humility and tact. Thankfully, there are those off us who do make that required effort. Even if it comes in fits until we learn how to be consistent.

I enjoyed this piece a lot.

Posted 9 Years Ago


dan

9 Years Ago

Michelle, Thank you, a little stream-of-consciousness self exploration with sights set on self impro.. read more
Michelle Coleman

9 Years Ago

It's okay to have expanding goals. 😉
a wonderful introspective write with so many layers Dan...and the metaphors are brilliant. I found the last verse inspiring...perhaps not a better me now, but definitely in the future..

great writing my friend

:) Julie

Posted 9 Years Ago


dan

9 Years Ago

Julie, Thank you so much for your supportive words. This piece really means a great deal to me. Thx .. read more
We all chase 'the better me' and most never really reach it. This may be cliche, but it's the journey of chasing a better me that I love the most. I don't know if I really ever want to reach my goal for it would be the end of the chase and I do love a chase. I love your last lines and that is how I want it to be:

perhaps, in time, i’ll be observant enough,
or at least be trying, to see ‘that’ self
in the distance.

I am the hound and my better self, the fox... it is a sly one!

Posted 9 Years Ago


dan

9 Years Ago

FT, I agree that I will never reach my goal because if I do ever reach it, new goals will be set and.. read more

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