Assassin

a deal with the devil? blood splatter drama in color

An offer to take care of her

demise, or so I’m told,

will hide the guilty pleasure

behind his eyes

of china blue.

 

By gunshot or the dagger

he scatters innocence clad in

black (or white)

bending every whim to fit his

homicidal scheme.

 

A toast to all unholy

echoes, blaring through the

mind of leather,

bindings sent to weather

the unforgiving storms

of shuttered hate.

 

The fragile ties

are shown the anger,

his assassin’s soliloquy,

leaving blood upon the

bedsheets and her

grimace.

 

dan © 2015

Music: "Point Blank" by Bruce Springsteen

Author's Note

Reviews

[RiverRei]

I enjoyed this. It is very dark but it's interesting to hear the other side of homicidal individuals. (Not trying to hint that you are homicidal, this just seems to look more into that view point.) I enjoyed reading this, thank you for sharing this!

[dan]

River, No I'm definitely not homicidal or violent but I do like to explore the darker side of my poetic mind. It can play out like a horror flick in my mind, but no popcorn. Thank you for your review. take care...dan

[~]

Oh... what a poem!! Precisely dark. Words that carry within them a powerful meaning that builds tension and adds to the theme. A bloody murder upon black and white.

The format of the poem was built very aptly and the music fits perfectly!

I like how you keep pushing yourself and delivering with applauding success!!

[dan]

Yes, and I usually don't like being pushed. Your warm words and a few notes from others has made my day. Thanks so much. take care...dan

[james_cooper]

Dan, your style is quite unique and interesting! Despite the fact that I`m not much fen of poems, I neither read nor write poems, I like it. As some of the others mentioned in their reviews, you have selected and combined interesting words, creating an unusual situation (plus the music background) and touching the reader in a specific way. As you said to me - keep on writing!

[dan]

James, Thank you, sir! Yeah, combining words is part of my goal (sorry, little sarcasm there). I often marvel at the way other writers arrange certain words in a line. I always wait a bit before posting a piece, look it over and see if I can make a change or two to spice up the wordplay. Other times it just flows that way and I post it. Who knows. I really appreciate your read/review. take care...dan

[...]

Dan, just got your request. Interesting topic. What goes around comes around and the s**t never ends. Despite all that, I think you portrayed it in uniquely creative fashion. Awesome write :)

[dan]

...and love gets done in by a hit man. Not your typical 'end of the love' poem, I admit. I am glad that you liked it. Thanks for your read/review. take care...dan

[Chain of Hearts]

Very interesting, I've never read anything like it!
Keep on writing!
-LK

[dan]

Leanna, Thank you for the review. And I hope you never read anything like it, because then I would be accusing someone of plagiarism. 8^) I appreciate you checking out my writing. take care...dan

[Chain of Hearts]

When I say 'I've never read anything like it' it usually means 'I've never read a story that portrays this message, and/or I've never read a story like this that has used this style of writing' lol but its really good :D

[dan]

Leanna, I knew what you meant, I was just being an a*****e joking about plagiarism. Sometimes I forget that people who don't know me do not know my twisted ideas of humor. And I thank you for the complimentary comment. take care...dan

[Chain of Hearts]

haha okay..oops I should of known that you are just like my dad lol :P

[dan]

I'll take that as a compliment. But I'm probably a lot older than your dad. dan

[....................]

Your words, selected picture and Springsteen lyrics fit the theme here, dan, of love's assassination. The deed has been carefully planned and is laid out perfectly in four, finely scribed stanzas. The offer in the first, the plan in the second, the assassination in the third, and the crime scene left at the end. Your writing is methodical and word selection precise as not to deviate from the plan you have taken a 'guilty pleasure' in constructing and carrying out. While the imagery is violent and dark it captures the end of love - not a pretty sight. Great write dan. - FT

[dan]

FT, Thank you for your kind words. This really was methodical, as it took me awhile before I was satisfied with the way it was presented. Once I get an idea it usually gets written pretty quickly but this was a bit more difficult, a bit more painstaking a process. Thanks again for your insights. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am feeling here the assassin is breaking the heart of a woman who has broken many herself...and she needs to be stopped, or at least feel what it feels like.

love the analogy all the way through.

[dan]

I like your take on this piece, Jacob. I like how you said, "...or at least feel what it feels like." That's the gist of the picture I was trying to paint and frame. Thanks for the great review. take care...dan

[modtoddinc]

what I love most is the music... as long as we are honest with one another, I want to read more than I hear. :) That being said, I like "A toast to all unholy, echoes, blaring through the mind of leather, bindings sent to weather, the unforgiving storms of shuttered hate." as well as, with edit: "The fragile ties are shown the [in] anger, his assassin’s soliloquy, leaving blood upon the bed sheets and her grimace." Overall excellent job, and keep writing friend.

[dan]

Todd, Thank you for your read/review, your input is appreciated. I'm not real certain what the edit, the way I wrote it is what I prefer, but thank you for the suggestion. take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

You have an aptitude to excell in whatever you write upon, and it overwhelmingly sweeps me off my feet! You are a true poet, Dan...in every sense of the word.

This blows me away, literally! Bravo, my friend!!

[dan]

Kelly, thank you so much for your warm comments. I'm flattered by your reviews always. Thank you for your support. take care...dan