seven inches of spring

someone tell all of us in Indiana, pa that it's springtime...I dare ya

seven inches of spring

 

woke up to ‘nothing shocking’ out in my front yard

seven more painful inches,

with icy covering, hard…

not a thing to spring, not a thing to guard,

the shining yard, like shimmering mirrors

shattered, tattered into prickly shards,

no such thing….as spring.

 

blinded sky all draped in gray

such a day, no other way…

i scream and shout, nothing to say…

to pray

for warmth and envy will

allow the gray to stay

not back away.

 

seven inches, maybe more

many more may be in store…

ol’ man winter’s favorite w***e

running, screaming thru my door

can’t be ignored…

 

dan © 2015

Reviews

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Hey :) move to San Diego, or tell me how to send you some warm rays. The next two days it will be 90 ;) I am sure it will melt your snow if I was able to send you some :)
The poem is one solid piece of brrrr cold :)

[dan]

Thank you, ms. Remember, I told you that I spent 3 months in San Diego at the Naval Training Center (NTC) back in the '80s and the climate was wonderful, if my wife and I were willing to be so far away from our families we'd be living there already. I tell Dee about the weather there and she gets this far-away, dreamy look in her eyes. What I say to every one of you Californians who tell me about the weather is this: but you don't ever see the beauty of the autumn changing of the leaves, which is...in and of itself, just as beautiful as anything in CA. And remember, I lived 2.5 years in Vallejo, right next door to the Napa Valley...gorgeous! Today is actually in the low 50s, rainy but better than seven inches of springtime. Thanks for your review, have a good one! take care...dan

[Tks]

A brutally hones piece of writing, Dan! I feel your words ebbing with sarcasm, and the way your sentences are conjured make it seem as though there is a disjointed fury about the weather that you are trying to express all at once. Seven inches..the phallic reference here too is striking, which goes on to highlight the complexity of your words!

[dan]

Tks, Actually it wasn't meant to be a phallic reference, though you're the second review I got to suggest that. (I was asked if the poem title was actually a poem title or a Viagra commercial!) And yes, there is a disjointed fury about it; all of us here in Western Pennsylvania are sick to death of this s**t...spring, come to us please? I appreciate your review, thanks so much. BTW, I'm telling all of my friends that I an having trouble keeping up with all of my friends' read/reviews; if you could send me read requests I'll definitely entertain them and give you my review. Have a great day! take care...dan

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Dan, here in ohio it is sunny. 40's and 50's this week. Hope it's not a spring joke. I really enjoyed your clever sarcasm here. "seven more painful inches, with icy covering hard" hahaha another cold hard f**k from mother nature. "Ol man winter's favorite w***e running, screaming thru my door" Ya that was priceless :)
I hope spring don't dick around with us too. Love this piece, Dan!

[dan]

lynn, Thank you for your witty (and tragically true) review. Here in Indiana, PA this has been the winter from hell, and the way climate change has affected our seasonal cycles, I predict we'll (eventually) have about 5-6 weeks of spring, then 5 months of temps and humidity in the 90s. Then a month of autumn then back to wintry grey day after day. Pessimistic? No, realistic. Hey, have I reviewed any of yours yet? Are we friends? I'm going to send a friend request to be sure. I have a hard time keeping up with all my friends' writes, so please don't hesitate to send me a read request, ok? take care...dan

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Hahaha It's cool, Dan. This ain't tit for tat.

[dan]

lynn, well actually the purpose of this site is to return the favor to those who review yours. If you don't want to send read requests I will make it to your page someday; this would just expedite my going there. Thanks! take care...dan

[Gee]

Nice write Dan.A couple of weeks of warm weather will banish all memories.

[dan]

Gee, Thank you for the encouraging review, and I hope you are right. I have bookmarked your page and will attempt to review some of yours ASAP. I may have said that before and neglected to actually bookmark you. I'm going to send a friend request, that way you can send read requests (it's hard for me to keep up with all my friends' writes...RR's help a great deal in that respect.) take care...dan

[Gee]

Cheers Dan,take it easy.

[Ryan Henderson]

Great poem, good imagery and phenomenal descriptive words! Keep writing!

[dan]

Thank you, Ryan, for the read/review. I appreciate your complimentary words and thoughts. take care...dan

[klarity]

Reading this as the sun is shining high up in the sky here in Paris... and not one cloud!
Nice piece as always. Klara

[dan]

Wow, I didn't know you were located in Paris. I visited a lot of French seaport towns when I was in the Navy but unfortunately never made it to The City of Lights. Are there really big chunks of romance floating in the air for all to avail themselves? 8^) Thank you for your fun comment. take care...dan

[klarity]

Because I have lived in Paris for so long, I may be overlooking those chunks of romance !

[MsJewel]

I can feel your frustration...enough of winter! I'm sending you some California sunshine my friend.

:) Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you bring a smile to a cloudy, snowy, dreary week...

thanks for this piece.

[dan]

Thank you Jacob. It seems that now, due to climate change, we in PA only have two seasons, winter and summer. A month from now you'll see me bitching about the heat I hope your spring is right around the bend. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i especially like the verbal irony in the title...

[dan]

Thanks again! dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

You're knee deep in freezing temperatures and snow, and here it's hot and balmy and 85 degrees! I think Mother Nature enjoys toying with us, just to see how we deal with it.

Hang in there, Dan...your muse is most amazing!

[dan]

Kelly, Mother Nature may be toying with us Pennsylvanians, but San Diego? Mom Nature just rolls out the sunny red carpet for you folks! (Ha!) That's OK, we get to see the leaves turn colors in the autumn, a gorgeous and overwhelming sight. Thank you for your review. Kelly, I have trouble keeping up with my reviews, if you wouldn't mind sending me RR's I can be sure I'm not neglecting your wonderful writes. take care...dan

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This is a great write and I had so much fun reading it - just what I needed on a cold winter's day on the north east coast of Newfoundland, Canada. We have a few feet of snow here on the ground and this morning temperatures (without wind shield) was -17 centigrade. Thanks for sharing!

[dan]

FT, thank you for the review; we don't have quite that much snow but we've had enough for one winter. Sir, I promised I'd review some of your poems...I still intend to but it would help if you sent me a read request. Are we "friends?" I'm going to send a friend request to be sure. take care...dan

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You are welcome and there's no hurry - my poetry isn't going anywhere. I will send you a request and check the friend status :)

FT

[dan]

Yay! Now we're friends for sure. Like I said I will visit your page for some read/review reciprocation. Have a great day! take care...dan

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Thanks Dan! I look forward to reading more of your work! Have a great day! - FT