A Captivating Thought

some mind-working ramblings taking up karmic space

It’s pitiful when lives are often

Put on hold, with sorrow;

When destiny is plainly thought to

Resolve itself tomorrow.

 

With midnight’s blackness I concede

There is no room for anguish,

A captivating thought if love is

Left alone, to languish.

 

When one’s strong thoughts are bested

By enduring scenes of madness,

It’s very captivating, one might say,

To dissipate love’s sadness.

 

One’s only strong indictment now

Concerns one’s dearth of sorrow,

And wishing one could find the words

To settle scores tomorrow.

 

dan © 2014

 

Reviews

[A Glow in the Pit of My..]

I love the depth you achieve using such beautifully written lines. Got a little chill and the goosebumps with this one. Sometimes ramblings/word vomit/mindgushes produce the best work - you don't try or think too hard about it. When it can just pour out of you, that's true skill!

[dan]

Thank you for your kind words, always appreciated. Should you ever have any constructive criticism I am very open to receiving that also. take care...dan

[A Glow in the Pit of My Soul]

Of course, I tend to appreciate things for what they are, but if I have any constructive points to make I'll be sure to give them! Knowing I won't hurt your feelings 😉

[dan]

Thank you again. take care...dan

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

I liked how you opened with destiny against tomorrow and at the end you paired it with settling scores at the end. I think the juxtaposition is brilliant concept... Well done.

[dan]

Thank you, Rico, I like your interpretation of the write. I like to leave some writes in an ambiguous stage to allow for multiple insights to be drawn. Yours is certainly an example of such insights. I am glad that you enjoyed it. take care...dan

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I like the message of the poem that persons do not have anything to worry about and that Our Father God created demons so that we could blame everything wrong on them if they try to posses us to do anything bad.

[dan]

Thank you for your read/review. I intentionally left this piece huddled in a little ambiguity to allow for different interpretations by readers. Yours is certainly a good example of that, and I thank you again. take care...dan

[Confuser]

One’s only strong indictment now -Concerns one’s dearth of sorrow, And wishing one could find the words
To settle scores tomorrow. This is my favorite stanza and Dan I beg to differ but your ramblings, as you say are quite good. After reading the first stanza I thought about lost dreams never fulfilled but then you speak of love; and madness & oh my the images of running like you know what...did that before; sometimes it is best! Thank you again. Dale

[dan]

I had hoped that this piece would prompt some thought in those who read it. I left it sort of ambiguous to allow for many different interpretations. Thanks, as always, for your read/review. take care...dan

[Confuser]

You're welcome. Take care too. Dale

[dan]

Does this mean anything? Am I just taking up space?
(Can you turn out the light?)