bitter boy blue

a story of one man's battle with suicidal urge

bitter boy blue…

 

boy is cracked awake; the day is dead before it starts…

he whispers nasty lyrics to the beat of broken hearts…

his bitterness influenced by events that cruelly mock him even as his

vapid world is ripped apart.

 

awkwardness evolving into antisocial glares…

sharpening awareness of the unrequited stares…

the boy-disguised-as-man finds hidden pain within the paradox of

laughter in a life where no one cares.

 

boy turns blue, the caustic hatred choking from within…

bitterness envelops every hopeless, fleeting whim…

boy turns up the volume, metaphorically; he mumbles jumbled prayers

to a God who doesn’t even know it’s him.

 

climbing misty staircase to his date with overt fear…

analyzing every urge while fighting back the tears…

headlines read, “another tragic suicide” while boy of bitter blue

embalms himself with hatred blaring in his ear…..

 

…a requiem of love is sung, but he would never hear.

 

 

                                                       

 

riki © 2014

 

Reviews

[Shane Mohamed]

Quite possibly the best work you've done. Believe it or not the font and its color added to the dramatic effect of the poem. Poem's great, but I can see beyond that; from this poem, I can tell you write now, you'd be an excellent screenplay writer. You've got that extra edge that not many can see. Keep writing my friend. A+

[dan]

Shane, Thanks so much for your read and review. Me writing a screenplay? I like watching movies but really can't imagine writing one. Thank you for the compliment though, I'm very flattered. take care...dan

[Shane Mohamed]

You've captured the essence of the boy's emotions and state of mind in an extraordinary manner. I think there's more to you than a poet; you're just being humble.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is really tough to read, the urgency in his inner cries...what keeps him finding a reason each day to live?
i see different possibilities here...how he is treated by others in general...feels like he just blends in with the scenery, has no self-worth, maybe instilled in him by abusive parents.
seems hopeless, and as readers we long for him to find a way out of the dark tunnel.

[dan]

Jacob, Thank you for your read and review. What keeps him going is his 'knowledge' that he is living the plan, "his date with overt fear." This suicidal urge and deed is, in his mind, his destiny and every slight, abuse or moment of despair was "another brick in the wall" (Pink Floyd), another step toward that edge. It ultimately consumes him. Thanks again for your review and insight. take care...dan

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

Each line pentrates and pierces through to my heart; Oh Riki, you really instill sadness into your readers heart. I feel like the boy in this regard. Good job, but sad to read.... Don't stop the ink from flowing..

[dan]

Bonaventure, Your reviews make me feel great; I believe that it takes a good writer to examine the writings of another and embrace the feelings it invokes to the degree for which it's designed. I intend for writes like this to be sad, but after the sadness hits I want the reader to be able to say, "Sad though it may be, I still enjoyed the experience." I get that feeling from you, and I thank you for that! take care...dan

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

You are welcome, and always.

[dan]

one's struggle, against all odds and hope, to fight back the urge to die