Deceptive Echoes

How something so benign as a soft breeze can turn violent, so damaging, so cruel.

Deceptive Echoes

 

Of the many songs in nature’s soundtrack

The sound of leaves softly rustling

Reflect the whispered echoes

Of beauty so rare

Yet fickle in its true intent.

 

A day with gentle breezes cascading

Through the sky’s reach,

Moving the branches and grass blades

In rhythm to its own steady beat,

A comfort to life and more…

Much more.

 

When a windy day turns violently inward,

Destruction rules the wayward plan

Reaching for a message

To save us from ourselves,

Awakened by the wind

As it weeps.

 

riki © 2015

 

Reviews

[ANTO]

I was very intrigued by the tag line. As I read I was minded of the Butterfly effect in chaos theory which kind of states (uber-paraphrasing here) that a butterfly flapping its wings gently on one side of the world could be responsible for hurricane winds on the other side.
You stirred the thought pot with this big stick Dan

[dan]

So is there a butterfly in China that's responsible for the blizzard blanketing the northeast of the US? I must get some bug spray! Thank you for your always insightful reviews, I surely do appreciate them. take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

This reminds me of the EF5 tornado that struck Moore, Oaklahoma in 2013. I liked the analogy you gave the wind, "as it weeps".

[dan]

Kelly, This was written for a challenge on Starlite, the Phrase/Theme Mulit-Challenge, or something like that with the required theme being windy days. Didn't get a chance to find out if I won or not. I had 21 challenge victories before the tech company they use lost over 3 months worth of submissions, running from October 2 till around Christmas. Hey, question: I wrote a poem for Christmas called "A Plea from Christmas Past," in which I bemoan the commercialization of the Christmas holiday season. Do you think I should post it here, or wait until next Christmas? Thank you, Kelly, for your continued support of my writing, you've very kind. take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

Funny you should ask me that. I had a couple poems with a Christmas theme that I meant to post, but didn't. I thought of that very thing...but then decided to save them for the season. But hey, that's me. Go with what you want!

[Riss Ryker]

So beautiful, yet as the poem progresses, an underlying sence of danger as we meet up with the power and fickleness of Mother Nature. She can turn on a dime, blowing promises with a gentle breeze, only to trick us with a storm of monumental proportions. Excellent!

[dan]

Riss, Thank you so much for your thoughtful read and review. Here in Indiana, PA I had to shovel about 9" of snow this morning, lovely weather! I read in your profile that you are 51. I am 57 and it is good to see someone near my age on WC. I feel as if I'm the ancient mariner here. I have bookmarked your page and will return the favor by reviewing a few of your writes later tonite. I will probably also send you a friend request because, well, I like having friends. take care...dan (my real name...riki is my pen name and the name of my ferret)

[Riss Ryker]

Awesome! Yes, we were promised a storm, but as usual, ended up with only a few inches. We're neighbors, too! I live in NY. I like having friends on here too. I wanted also to invite to a BETTER writing community, too. (I hope your offended if your loyal to this one.) The one I'm a member of has SO much more to offer. The reviews are fantastic, the writers are older, and give amazing critiques. They also have their own magazine and PAY for accepted submissions. There's contests, weekly wednesday challenges, and Power Hour sundays. You make a LOT of friends, there, too. If your curious, let me know.

[dan]

Riss, Yes I'd be interested. You make it sound great, and I'm willing to try new stuff. Send me more about it, please? take care...dan

[Riss Ryker]

It's Writer's Carnival. It IS great. I can't say enough good stuff about this site. The members just welcome you with open arms, no matter HOW you write.

[dan]

Riss, Thank you, I'll be sure to check it out when I have some time. take care...dan

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

You've written well, more ink to your pen.

[dan]

Thank you, sir. I appreciate your review and your comment. take care...dan

[willweb]

Great visual here...this felt good reading, even when it became extremely blustery in the final stanza. Very cool, I like how you have painted this picture with you words.

[dan]

willweb, Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate any feedback I get. take care...dan (my REAL name)