Crash and Burn

Members of US Navy going to a sailor's home to notify them of sailor's death.

Crash and Burn

 

Impatient knock brings cautious answer,

Morbid news to parallel

The blend of goodness crashed and burned,

The faithful seek new spots to dwell.

 

The one in charge, so bleak, detached…

The chevron sparkling on his sleeve,

Leads fearfully, stark dread attached,

He’s otherwise inclined to grieve.

 

If one might draw a parallel,

A nominal attempt to merge;

This gingerly assembled hell, and

A soup from which one can’t emerge.

 

And lest one look at this hot mess

And feel a trifle envious,

One’s glad to know this troubled tale:

So stark and somehow frivolous.

 

riki © 2015

Reviews

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

growing in the inner city knocks at the door brought an array of emotions..there were different knocks by the police, social workers, parole /probation officers that were different than knocks from family and friends. Than there are those knocks that come in the early am causing people much fear.

these are brilliant lines here

This gingerly assembled hell, and
A soup from which one can’t emerge.

[dan]

Rico X, You are so correct. Some knocks just SOUND LIKE it's bad news. The tension before answering the door is thick and palpable. Thank you for your read and review. take care...dan (my real name)

[Jerome F Knox III pseudonym Nefarious J. Dorsey]

Thanks Dan for the comments and for sharing...

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

Impatient knock brings cautious answer... Can you throw light on this line please?....

[dan]

Bonaventure, I simply mean that sometimes there are knocks on the door that you just KNOW bring bad news. This premonition colors your feelings as you answer the door. Thank you for your read and review. take care...dan (my real name)

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

Thank you Dan for carrying me along.

[dan]

Bonaventure, Thanks again for your comments. I plan to visit your page a bit later and read some of your writing. Have a great day! take care...dan

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

You are welcome; and always, I'll be glad having you around.

[TheLostMind]

A really good write.. I loved the lines -
"If one might draw a parallel,
A nominal attempt to merge;
This gingerly assembled hell, and
A soup from which one can’t emerge." - so true.

[dan]

TheLostMind, Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review. Please feel free to criticize (cordially) if you read something from me that you find fault with. I welcome ALL reviews. take care...dan (my real name)

[Matching Socks]

That's a very difficult thing to experience I imagine.
You've brought this to life with your poetry.
Well done Dan.

[dan]

Thank you, Ana. I always welcome your review. I respect your opinion, so even if it isn't flattering, I would appreciate your input. Have a great day! take care...dan