Too Late

Am I too late?

Blood is dripping from him.

I couldn't talk.

I couldn't do anything.

I screamed for help.

Hoping that he will be saved.

But it was too late.

"Thank you." he finally said.

He said his last words

With a smile on his lips.

I couldn't speak.

"You can do it." I cheered.

But before he hears it,

No air is coming from his.

I shook him and shouted,.

But it was too late.

The ambulance came,

They helped him to recover.

Too late, his last tear fell on his cheeks.

"Why?" i asked him

And cried a lot.

If I can only do something

To return his life, I would do it.

But it is already late.

He left.

I'm hurt now.

Putting a rose on top of his coffin.

"Goodbye." I smiled.

Author's Note

Any comments or suggestions?

Reviews

[shoaib]

wowwwwww
what a write... intense yet beautiful

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This poem was sad. I know that hearing someone's last is hard...I wouldn't be able to handle that. I know I wouldn't. Good write though. Thanks for sharing. :)

[alison13]

this is a good poem. i was wondering what happened to the guy though. anyway, it's a tragic one, yet it's good. keep writing :)

[paul]

you have an excellent command of the english language. and a real gift for story telling

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This is quite the sad write, but it is well written and your emotions are expressed well.

[Tomi]

i think I'll want to know what killed him, was he hit by a car? was the writer the cause..? you get what am saying? good thinking

tomi

[Alicia™]

Aww, that's so sad. It's a story, but in poetry-form, which is interesting. A couple of suggestions that I have is to describe how the person smiled in the last time. Woefully? Regretfully? In the lines above that, you expressed sadness, but simply "I smiled" sort of makes me think that that person has accepted it, and is letting go.

Overall, good job!

[♪GetUse2MyMelodie..]

No suggestions but I want to say this was a sad poem =( I don't think I can ever live seeing someone die...
But I liked how you kept repeating "too late" that was a nice touch =)
Nice job