Drift Away

 

 

 

 

 

Drift Away

 

　

　

　

What wonder there is,

in even the simplest of things;

those quietudes of purity oft

tempered with the complexity,

of tangled skin and intricacy.

 

Like a smile, you can only read,

goose bumps from someone

you never even met,

or the flight of an invisible kite

high up in the clouds

tethered by only a thread of trust

and some slippery, grip of faith.

 

Its funny how the special person

can make it seem like you’ve almost

been sightless and deaf all your life,

how the colors in music

now almost blind your ears,

how the melody of a sunrise

now almost silences your eyes,

how every moment begins

with so much more meaning,

and how every instance yet

has so much more loneliness,

because you now live in

the land of I wonders,

and, what ifs?

 

I don’t know.

 

Its everything you wanted

that you never even knew,

and, its everything you didn’t want

that you were afraid, to ever know.

 

Ahh, the balance of being.

And, this broken ruled, equity

of impermanence.

 

I never felt how the tongue of tides

reached deep, inside

the mouths of rivers that empty yet,

in stride into the sea,

until I met you.

 

Nor how the blustery

of vicissitudes could be so

tempestuous, and frigid

when they disappear with not notice

or consideration.

 

But then, since when has wind

itself ever known

which way it was headed.

 

All it ever wanted to do,

just like life itself,

was to chase the shadows,

of a setting sun,

in the search sometimes,

of an unwanted afterward

or yet perhaps

to the betrothed of some

wordless embrace or,

that song unsung.

 

 

But then what more really,

were we ever meant to thirst?

 

Too bad sometimes,

the wondrous kites

that get to dance

with wind in flight

atop the waves

of floating sea

in bottles trapped

on gentle breeze

lose the hand

that held the tie

that once enabled

kiss from sky

I guess for never,

while stays.

 

Even dreams,

that drift away.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Aimee Mahathy]

Oh wow, this poem is so beautiful! I rarely read "long" poems, but this one kept me going on and on and on, until I realized I'd been scrolling for longer than usual.
I loved the images used in this, especially the kite. Your vocabulary is extensive and refreshing! It's amazing that you managed to sum up so much so perfectly in two simple lines.
Great write!

[Amethyst Moon]

Hey! thanks a lot for your review I'm glad you enjoyed it. I just started reading a couple of your poems here and I can honestly say that I think you are a very talented poet. Much emotion and sentiment evoked from your dreamy words.

[deeps]

This isjust plain wonderful and amazing!
I throughly enjoyed this write. Very well written.
Awesome write!

[Georgia Gypsy]

o.O.o!! that is some seriously sweet flowing imagry and sentiment! i LOVE the brilliant word picture's you evoked with this!! My mind wrapped around each phrase and painted the picture with vibrant color's!!
What an awesome talent you have, this is a fav of mine!!!
thanks for sharing!!

[Crowley]

Really Antonio? You got some serious gift going on. Without trying to break anything down into its parts, your stuff makes me feel like I'm on some kind of mystical journey, and I am moving through it at my own pace. Between you and MM I have to hold myself back from reading everything you have written all at once and try to read only one a day and think and savour your work like it should be savored and appreciated. Good job my friend.

[Rhonda]

this was a very good poem. you have talent at this.

[Stammers]

I had to turn my music down and crane my neck into the screen. My FAVOURITE poem on this site. Ever. Completley amazing. You're published right? You should be published. Let me pull scary faces at anyone who says you can't be. For me, it was what poetry should be, thank you sooo much for posting. I'll be re-reading it forever.

[Kim]

Your words are like a knive going threw hot buttter. So smooth and effortless. Wounderful writer!

[Ferg]

I composed this great comment and then WC crashed and my comment was lost in the fray so I shall try to replicate it once again for you..

I think that you have great ideas in these poems of yours. I do feel a bit bogged down by wordiness at times and I think you could tighten them up just a bit. In this piece, you have indeed presented some great images with your words. For me, the final verse could stand on its own as a poem:
Too bad sometimes,
the wondrous kites
that get to dance
with wind in flight
atop the waves
of floating sea
in bottles trapped
on gentle breeze
lose the hand
that held the tie
that once enabled
kiss from sky
I guess for never,
while stays.
Even dreams,
that drift away.

I gravitate toward the more minimalist pieces and I like to leave some to the readers imagination and interpretation by being conspicuously brief at times.
That being said, I think overall you have done some fine writing!

[Ladysue]

This was so beautiful. Great imagery. A pleasure to read. It is just like that too. You have captured it perfectly...excellent...

[Gheeneil]

Perfect word choice which creates vivid imagery. The description is just beautiful. This is one great piece!