Gone

This pain was too much to bear so I wrote it down to let it out

I hold her close

She's crying just as hard as me

Those two words carry so much harm

Why can't we just let things be?

 

I ask her not to go

I fall to my knees

She lightly replies, "No"

I wipe the tears away so I can see

 

Bloodshot eyes...massive headache

No words to speak

My entire body aches

My spirit is weak

 

I can't let her go

I hold on as tight as I can

The tears continue to flow

These are the signs of a broken man

 

There she goes

And here I stay

My heart has an abundance of woes

Can there be no other way?

 

I gave you my heart!

You promised you would never hurt me!

I knew this was going to happen from the start

Yet, I was too blinded to see

 

And so I begin to walk

My tears blend in with the rain

No words...no need to talk

And now begins my neverending pain

Reviews

[Jodie Ng]

i think if you use punctuation, itd be much better but still, it captures the emotion so well!

[Laura Maidah]

Definitely one of your better attempts

[HopelessRomantic]

thanks

[Blue Ivory]

It's sweet and it's beautiful :) I love how you rhymed it so nicely. This is deep and touching...

[HopelessRomantic]

Thank you

[demureminds]

The emotions in this were very well expressed. My favorite part is the second line on the last stanza. I liked the relationship you created between tears and rain. Well written piece!

[Colleen a Bean]

I can relate I felt from the start that the guy I love would end us and leave me I begged I pleaded I cried out in pain and he held me but still left me worst part was it was prom weekend uhg not that much fun when it feels like your losing the one u love for good.

[Jeanette]

This is so real. I have been on both sides. I've been left, and I've been the one leaving. Trust me when I say it's not easy to walk away either. This is really truly relatable... Like to a T. Awesome write. =)

[HopelessRomantic]

Thanks

[Jeanette]

You're welcome. =)

[Cole Hayley]

Very truthful and very well written. It is a beautuiful piece and i love the emotion put into it.

[afra]

awww touchy ...but beautiful

[That_Girl]

Always be skeptical when someone promises to never hurt you... I swear it's a jinx. Sad but well written poem. Hope everything worls out for you/

[HopelessRomantic]

Thanks