A Skilled Sailor

There’s a ship
in the mist
of my heart
that made it
safe to harbor.
When he holds me
he can smell
the salt in my hair;
feel the damp
in my bones.
I let him touch me.
His hands are warm;
I imagine what
they will look like one day,
lined with time,
patched with scars.
He moves my hair
out of my face
so I can picture him
perfectly:
he stands
at the helm.
Sometimes I try
to apologize,
but he only kisses me
and says,
It’s been such a long trip, 
hasn’t it?
(Hasn’t it…)
There is wind between us,
tides, and shells.
Seaweed.
Sand.
There is time.
A lot of it.
His body.
Mine.
And our laughter
like the moon
that keeps drawing us back
to the same place,
over and over
again.

Reviews

[Shawn Jahaffie]

Man, you really knocked the pacing out of the park with this one. How do you make the line length decisions? I noticed the style of this one was much different than the frog poem, and I think both work for each. Interestingly enough, this almost seems conversational or spoken to me (I can almost hear a voice other than my own while reading this), while the frog poem feels literary through and through. The last line is killer. It's natural, constant, and unchanging, the tides of ocean and the moon... If your guys' laughter is truly as consistent and serene as the tides, I'd say you're doing it right!

[Katrina]

I never really think too much about the line length decisions. I just always stop the line where it feels natural to me. I read everything I write back over to myself out loud and if the line length makes me stumble, then I change it up -- same goes for rhythm or whatever. I am not professional enough to know where you're supposed to break a line :P

[B]

So beautiful
each line
and each word

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

Incredibly soft and tender ethereal romantic write. Loved the descriptions and the style in which the poetry is written. Nice job!

[just another mac withou..]

This has a wonderful feel to it...classic yet fresh to me. Well penned and incredibly creative with some of the strongest style I have ever seen, not just here.

[Jordan]

My heart is pierced by Cupid
I disdain all glittering gold
There is nothing can console me
But my jolly sailor bold.

Made me think of that.

Your poem is bittersweet. Honestly it seems like she is looking from a widow's watch.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Very romantic and rosy....

[~]

A very beautiful and romantic piece Katrina. I liked the imagery you used and the metaphor of the ship making it safe to the heart. This person who calms your seas is a keeper!! :D

[Katrina]

Thanks so much for your kind review! This is one of my favorite pieces, inspired by my boyfriend who loves sailing.

[~]

you are welcome! :D

[Misery]

A gentle and patient melody of words lightly treading down the page.
You have a priceless quality of saying much with just a few words. Well done, dear poet.

[Justin]

that was really good :) :) :) it tells a great story :)