Coming Up Roses

I planted flowers last year-

nothing at all sprouted until now,

sun in your face shone brightly over me

everything's blooming a rosy hue

Reviews

[Clockwork]

I think this one works on two levels. You have the surface level with the planting of the roses. Sometimes it takes season to reap what you planted. On a deeper level though, I think this one refers to a relationship. I can see your first line referring to the first few advances of a new relationship. Either scenario blooms into an age of growth and beauty. Thank you for sharing this one.

[rhythm&blues]

Thank you for your lovely review Clockwork.

[Antoñyo]

Yes, there is the double meaning here but for me this is a pleasant early morning read that can hit home for some of the precious few::
I put mySELF out there awhile back...
Nobody saw...not until you
The future's looking brighter

Love the power in its simplicity,
thanks for sharing

[Onku Ghosh]

Just as relationships need time and nurturing to mature so also roses need the right time and sun to help them bloom.YOu just have to give them enough time.......can't rush either.
Beautifully penned thoughts

[Stella Armour]

i see a double meaning here too, planting seeds and waiting for them to grow to full bloom.. well thought out..:o)

[Rita L. Sev]

Beautiful images to express the reward of patience - in time, the flowers bloom...

Well done!

[rhythm&blues]

Thanks again Rita....a little bit of patience and lots of sun.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This was quite sublime. I love the imagery, and the metaphor of planting something and watching it grow, which can be applied to so many facets of life. You have written concisely here, but it is still quite striking. I would suggest only one, wee thing...perhaps some punctuation:

I planted flowers last year--
nothing at all sprouted until now,
sun in your face shone brightly over me,
everthing blooms a rosy hue. (too out the word "now" because it was used twice in the piece)

This is just my own take on it, but I appreciate it as it is as well. I just think a little punctuation would add to the drama and emotional impact, but still, this one is going into my favorites!

[rhythm&blues]

I agree with you Sarah, I've seen many poets don't use punctuation, I'm in my beginning stages here, I do appreciate your wonderful critique.

[rhythm&blues]

Revised, let me know if you think it works, thanks again Sarah.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Much better... The punctuation thing is a personal choice, and both ways have merit. To me, I use punctuation if a thought is complete and I am introducing a new one, and if I don't want to use punctuation, I try to make sure that all my lines are single thoughts. I don't know...just my personal opinion. But, the way you have this now really makes the beginning sharper, which I think is fantastic.

[Samuel Jack]

Lovely words with pretty meanings, proper flowery stuff. Very honest and adult.

I do feel this piece could have another stanza, don't ask me why.

Regards

Samuel

[rhythm&blues]

I have a hard enough time getting out one stanza, I do appreciate your suggestion, thank you for reading Samuel.

[Angi]

I am so happy to hear your roses are finally blooming! It has been a rough time, lately...I know. Angi~

[rhythm&blues]

Thanks Angi, think everything is coming up roses now.

[Sheila Kline]

What I say first is, "Ah, how nice"! The time was right for the right flower to be found!

[rhythm&blues]

Thank you Sheila.

[Sami Khalil]

A stunning poem. Thank you for sharing...:)

[rhythm&blues]

Thank you for reading, much obliged for your review. :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)