Lightblub Moment

Wandering aimlessly, through the dark
power was shut down once you left

paid the balance in full, plus arrears

 forgotten, you don't always need service
 for lightbulb voltage moments

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is very interesting. I had to read through it about three times before I fully grasped the larger metaphor at work, and then like a "lightbulb" it happened in my head...I knew what you were talking about and I felt it all at once. There is darkness, sometimes, no matter what we do or how many lights we turn on, candles we light, etc., but then again, out of the darkness there always comes light eventually, for the day always dawns. Nice wordplay and ideas here.

[rhythm&blues]

Thank you Sarah, glad you got my lightbulb moment.

[wunder]

~“Wandering aimlessly, through the dark”~
~Seems to always help you create!~ ;-)

[icelandicblue]

Our minds can be illuminated when darkness is all around us. It is not always a comforting place to be. This is a thought provoking piece.

[Onku Ghosh]

NIce idea of making the words nearly invisible to denote darkness.Wonderful term "lightbulb voltage moments" THe way you have used a real situation to present an emotional one( as stated by Leslie) is indeed commendable.You seem to be brimming with ideas.
A short poem with a great impact.Great work!!!!

[Ency Bearis]

Intriguing thoughts and nice use of metaphor.

[Einstein Noodle]

i also appreciate the metaphor. it sparks my imagination.:} i relate to paying in full plus plus. service not always necessary but sure helps sometimes. really like your style!
E.

[rhythm&blues]

Wow and thank you, you made my day!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

no, you don't always need service..that is for sure...wonderful use of metaphor here.


jacob

[rhythm&blues]

Thanks for reading my scribbles Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you write very keen insights with your "scribbles"--

[rhythm&blues]

I do so appreciate your lovely comment Jacob, thank you again.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A fine piece that stands alone, well done, good read.

[rhythm&blues]

Thank you Thomas.

[Leslie Philibert]

fine poem, the use of a real situation to present an emotional situation, well written..

[rhythm&blues]

Much obliged Leslie, thank you for reading.

[Kristin Lee]

Very well penned. As they often say, sometimes it's darkest before dawn. We all come to realizations within relationships in our own time. Great metaphor at play here.

[rhythm&blues]

Thanks Kristin, glad you enjoyed it.