Heart Song

When the heart overflows its pain

healing  begins as a prayer,

like the bird freed from its cage

able to chirp a sweet love song

Reviews

[Fernando Pessoa]

I really do love this sense of lifting music to make the heart soar above its pain.. its suffering cries. There is always hope to be found if we let it flow. Thank you for this.

Sadness flies on the wings of the morning and out of the heart of darkness comes the light. ~ Jean Giraudoux

[rhythm&blues]

Excellent quote, thank you Paul.

[icelandicblue]

To purge pain is to be free. You capture that very nicely with your bird metaphor. We all want a chance to sing.

[Angi]

I love short poetry and this one is good. Don't hold on to all the pain, let it go and you will be set free!

[Sami Khalil]

A beautiful poem of truth...:)

[unsavable_soul]

Very inspiring.
Nice work on this R&B, it has good mental imagery and shows a clear meaning. The theme one should consider in dealing with suffering, let it free and find your voice in any form. A cage with to many birds would be a lot of dead birds, they can't all be fed. I go to far with my reviews sometimes. I like to roll in others writing and soak it up. While short this captures a great idea and does so in poetic fashion. I look forward to more of your works. I also usually put the rating score I intend to place upon it at the bottom of my review visible so I am upfront and so as that I am approachable in my honesty. I have not looked at enough of your work yet to compare this with other skills and talents you already seem to have. So I give an honest rating to the value of your work as I see it. If this should bother you let me know as I will happily respect all who show respect.
Sincerely
Christopher
85/100

[rhythm&blues]

Quite the contrary kind sir, I appreciate you extended review, I'm in my infancy as far as poetry goes, I've only just begun. Any critique to me is welcome here, I'm actually shocked people are reading me. I'm delighted with your score, thank you kindly Christopher. I will make it my business to visit your pages, but I'm not as suave at reviews as you are.

[unsavable_soul]

Do your thing,
I ask you not review me in return for my review. If you feel that urge find a piece you love somewhere and review it with honesty and share it through read request with me and others you think might enjoy it. I would love to know what you like to read as I think that is telling also of a writer. No one is an infant in writing, only maybe taken few steps as of yet. I am very glad my honesty is well received. We only grow with honesty and willingness. So I give mine and have grown much from others here. Of course you're welcome to review anything of mine you see fit, I only ask honesty. I know I am doing it right when I am worried I might hurt another writer but attempt to find a way to aid.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Jack...]

Beautiful, indeed the heart needs to fly and sing after feeling the pain.

[rhythm&blues]

Thank you Jack, I'm elated you like my poetry.