Chained

"everything for the sake of love"

CHAINED

Nobody understands,

Why I'm being faithful.

Isn't that's what needed?

A loyal dog?

I love him and only him,

Even when she's with him.

What can I do?

I'll only make it hard for him.

I understand what they say,

Secretly dating is our game.

Staying indoors as always,

Getting a hit if I complain.

That's what I'll always do,

Be as loyal as I can be.

Can't embarrass him in public,

Since being a man is a sin already.

Author's Note

Could you guys tell me what you think? I do have grammar problems so I'm sorry for that.
Also, I'm just basing this from my point of view from what I've heard/seen/read. This is just a try. I don't mean to offend anyone if ever I did offend anyone...

Reviews

[Saddam]

A true love never see what the other think and what they are say...It just seek found him/her happy and try to make. Love this poem dear. For my view, poetry can not be write without grammatical error so don't be panic and focus on point. PEN ON DEAR.

[Rheeca Verons]

Thank you so much.

[Zoe_N.]

Your poem IS so brave. I thought I could relate but the last sentence is a bomb.. LOL I dont know if understood the poem correctly but my interpretation is tells me that it is for a Bi? ^_^

[Shaquana Adams]

Even when she's with him.
What can I do?
I'll only make it hard for him.

I think the poem flowed really well until the end. That last line didn't seem to fit. I really enjoyed the passionate loyalty. I don't know whether it was intentional or not but it made me think of a dog. This poem is really well written and insightful :)

[Aura Inanna]

I love the idea of invisible chains of loyalty. Even forcible loyalty, it's love and it's beautiful. Just like this poem. The writing is very soft in it's approach to the subject, and it makes the reader listen. It may not be the right word, but I keep wanting to call it a cute poem. :) I can't wait to read more from you.

[FelicityAllona]

Rhee~ :)) hahaha.. you changed the last line.. :))
But this is good! :))

[Rheeca Verons]

Thanks~ changed and yes, it is better.:)