Gone

I felt weightless. 

I couldn't move, I couldn't think, and I could barely open my eyes. I tried to raise my hand but I couldn't. I felt a warm drop of water fall on my cheek. I tried to look up and gleaming in the sun was the face of the one who was holding me. It was him. He was crying. For Me. I managed a frail, weak smile. Tears began to stream down my cheeks. He held me tighter, he just didn't let go. The ground was cold and the sun was setting. I was fully disoriented. I tried to recall what had happened. 

All I could remember was crossing the street and a sudden car crash. I guess the car was his, the boy whom I liked, almost loved, seven years ago. I felt blood on my head and left arm was burning. It was my fault, just the sight of him froze my steps and the car crash happened. 

I started regretting the things I had done seven years ago. Why didn't I just tell him that I liked him? Why was I afraid? Those intense brown eyes behind his spectacles were just as beautiful as they were seven years ago. I was crying, even though I was happy to be dying like this, in his arms.

I wanted to ask him a million questions : Where had he been? Was he working? Why did he never answer my messages on facebook? But I couldn't speak, no matter how hard I tried. 

The wind blew harder, we were alone. My eyes were burning, I wanted to talk to him, but it was destined to be this moment when I  couldn't speak. 

I tried to look away from him, I couldn't see him cry like that. But he put his hand on my cheek and brought my face back to where it was earlier. My heart was shattered. All these years, I could speak nonsense, non-stop. But the time when I really need to talk to someone that special, my voice had failed.

 

  Was that fair? I asked myself

Suddenly, my body went cold and numb, I was going to go any second. My heartbeat began to slow down. The wind made my open air fly aimlessly, some of it falling on my face, just before my eyes. It was no use brushing them behind my ears.  My arm lifted up and touched his warm, wet cheek.

Suddenly my vision began to blur, I saw a light and then everything went black. 

I was content. At least I had felt true love before death came to me. 

Author's Note

I change the story and divided into paragraphs. I edited it and expanded the details...
Please review!!!

Reviews

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

this is very beautifully written i love this a lot!!!

[Silvia]

This is really lovely. I like that it's short, so it feels like it's just a few moments before she dies, something fleeting and yet so full of meaning.

[Ellie Reeves]

this is great! emotional but not overkill either.

[Mason-lana]

It had me from the beginning, I read the first paragraph and then I just couldn't stop reading, it's really great, good description in the beginning.

[Sleeping Maiden]

AWWWWWWW...wow. this made me teary somehow. I don't know why. It was really tragic and i know how it feels to lose someone. i like the ending. Sometime we do find peace in death. =) Wonderful story!!! I love it. The emotions you make the reader feel is great! Thank you for writing.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful tale of love and lost. I like the desire to find something. I like the way you ended the story. Sometime we can find peace in death. Thank you for the excellent story.
Coyote

[Layla J Omorose]

Loved this story. It was such a short and brief story yet you were able to capture her emotions and the events that led up to this point effortlessly. I found very few mistakes here and there but the ones I did find can be fixed with another read through. Beautiful story and I wonder if you toyed with the idea of writing from the guy's perspective because I would love to know what he was feeling at that moment and what his thoughts were. Did he love her? Did know she loved him?

[Aehr]

I don't know if I'll ever be able to write that. The girl herself didn't know if the boy liked her. It'll always remain an unsolved mystery.

[luna11]

Wow...
This is great :)
It's descriptive, it's emotional, I love it!
Very well written. keep it up because you're a great writer :)

[Southern Cross]

I am so glad you edited this. It is a beautiful, moving short and now everything is clear. You have taken advice and used it constructively to create a beautiful, sad story. Well done :)

[AK]

Nice! I really liked the way you wrote it. The first line was totally intriguing:)
You wrapped up the piece reallybwell and I like the questions the persona asks herself. Great job, keep writing!