Shy

Shy of everyone

Eyelids almost closed

People nudging

'Go, its just a dance'

The normal Indian wedding

Everyone around dancing

Aunts and uncles doing crazy steps

Feeling weird, feeling conscious

Why do they watch like that?

Mom calling me to the floor

One step, then another

I reach. I just start swaying

Hands rise up, beats filling within me

More girls join in, it becomes like a show

Consciousness lifted up

More songs, more fun

And people saying, 'You rocked out there!'

Another shy smile, and I start again

Author's Note

Just some thoughts I had on the dancing part of my Aunt's wedding. I was always a shy dancer, although I do dance well once I'm not conscious. This was what I thought will happen, but it actually turned out well!

Reviews

[eglantine]

I used to have a friend in hs who would perform Indian dances--and it was very beautiful and rich with life as well as color. Make the most of that :)

[afra]

awwww ...beautiful ..well done

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

I wish I could see you dancing :)

[Autumn]

I love dancing, i did ballet for a long time but every time i go on stage i faint. I've got an increadible stage fright, so i can really relate to it!

I really lke the style of structure, i gives this kind of poem/story at the same time.

[Aehr]

thank you.. and yea, i can understand what you're talking about :)

[deepblue04]

I can relate to this a lot. I like how you were shy at first until you were almost dragged into it (?) but yeah its ok for people to drag you.

[❀ Gabriela ..]

"Feeling weird, feeling conscious

Why do they watch like that?"

I can definitely relate to this, the way it feels when you have so many people watching. Excellent poem, and wonderful happy ending :)

[J. J. Nightingale]

There are many first steeps in life .. We learn by reaching, and doing .. When someone smiles with intent, we grow a little taller, and smile a little wider .. ..

I like this .. Jazz

[khalid]

very nicely written. feeling such a shy means you pay much attention to others more than you should. it also means you need to have more self confidence..forget the presence of others and live your life..

[Laura Maidah]

Very great. I can sketch this. Every line is a consequence of the next. You are very precise with which words you choose to keep and which ones you omit. NIce work! My dad's weddings are like this. I'm half Syrian, even though I don't look it.

[Southern Cross]

A sweet poem filled with innocence. I liked the fact that you overcame the shyness and enjoyed the dance. Life is like that, we must take chances and just dance