Frozen

This just came to me, I don't know, I just felt like it. Please Review!

                                      

 

I am water

Wild, fresh and moving

Bearing the weight of everything

Floating over me,

Living within me,

Fallen at my feet

I am water

 

I am water,

Misty, and dark

Flowing, never ending

Vulnerable and wet

I am water

 

I am water

Now stopped and dead cold

Not moving, stationary

Lost in time

Now,

I am ice           

Reviews

[deepblue04]

wow, I like this!! so creative! good job!

[eglantine]

Great first line :) but hmmm I kinda wanna try my hand at your poem. I hope ya don't mind.

I am water

fresh and moving
the weight of everything.
Float over me,
Live within me.

I am mist and dark,
never ending.


Now stationary

Lost in now,
for I became ice.

[Soul Fire]

Lovely!

[Serenity Faith]

o0o0o Makes me want to go up to the mountains and swim in the river. The water there is as cold as ice. Very well done ^_^

[Harley (arbiter)]

Oh cool. From waters point of view turning into ice. Awesome!99

[❀ Gabriela ..]

Beautiful! I love the imagery and the way you portray the water as I gradually turns into ice. Excellent job!

[J. J. Nightingale]

Each emotion you write, I have felt, and understand .. Sometimes we are just the last droplet of a tear slowly descending to earth .. other times we are as the darkest depths of the sea .. lost and still ..

I like your words .. Jazz

[Alicia Beavis]

Interesting twist at the end that certainly caught my attention. It created such an interested image in my mind turning from 'water' to 'ice'. Lovely, emotive piece.

[khalid]

very nice flow, interesting poem..smart in making similarity between your feelings and water since both of them have changeable status..maybe you are ice frozen now but for sure you wont stay like that for long, at least due to global warming lol..