Held On A Bit Too Long

Wrote my way through a block. SOS.

I held on a bit too long

And as my hands slip away

The rain adheres to my skin

Like these drops, I wish I could stay

Oh, but I held on a bit too long

And leave now I must

For what is our past now, anyhow

Other than memories collecting dust?

I held on a bit too long, 

At too large a cost.

And there is not much I have gained,

Compared to the time I've lost

I held on a bit too long,

I would have tried and stayed.

But the sun is too strong for both of us,

And there is too little shade.

I held on much too long,

I may have fought too hard

And to leave my past behind,

Is my one and only card.

I'm not saying it doesn't hurt, darling,

But I can't go on playing this game.

I can't go on hurting for both of us,

I can't go on taking the blame.

Love you, well I still do,

But hardly is that ever enough.

We're much too weak to handle the storms,

To save each other, when it gets rough.

I held on much too long,

And now its time for me to go.

I will bleed and cry and crush my heart,

Knowing what I know.

Author's Note

So stressed. I hate writer's blocks. Opinion?

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

I am intrigued by the thought of rain sticking to one's skin. I live in the desert. Rain when it comes barely reaches a surface let alone stick to it. Well done.

[Starcaller]

Wow, I thought it was pretty awesome, I love how your words play with imagery it really makes it come alive. The ending also leaves this sense of mystery for the audience as they wonder what the character knows.
" For what is our past now, anyhow
Other than memories collecting dust?"
^ very powerful. I think those where my favorite lines.
Keep up the good work!

[Flutterby aish]

Writer's block IN YOUR FACE!!! Haha! Gurl.....its an amazing one. One thing i can definately say for this one is - Ink flowed creating a masterpiece....
"I would have tried and stayed.
But the sun is too strong for both of us,
And there is too little shade" Excellence and brilliance reflect in the word play. Keep writing. Luv ya gurl. :*

[Andrew N. Farrens]

Vivid words. I usually suffer from writers block when it comes to reviews, especially on an iPhone, so excuse my lack of praise but I truly think this is a wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing.....

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the honest tone and realistic ending.
"I held on much too long,
And now its time for me to go.
I will bleed and cry and crush my heart,
Knowing what I know."
Love is never fair. Can't get what we want always. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote