What If?

What if the moon came down someday,

To light up for you and I?

Would you care then? Or would I just be-

Something in the corner of your eye?

What if the stars sang a song someday,

So that you and I can dance?

Would I matter for the stars that twinkle in your eyes-

Would I be worth a chance?

What if the sun burnt our doubts away,

Just so that we can kiss?

Would it just be a trick of fate's hand,

Or instead-true love's bliss?

Reviews

[Penny]

Looks like an imagination of a one sided lover to me. Full of longing and unique. Very good.

[Inder24]

This little poem of yours has a wonderful emotion in it . I really like the imagination the poem gave me :D . good work

[Author Rucha Joshi]

So so beautiful. you inspire a lot!

[Angad Waraich]

Nice little piece of poetry.
All the questions asked are interesting and suit the mood of the poem.
Well done.

Thank you for sharing

[kingblaq]

The ache in this piece! Its short n strong!
These are the questions i find myself asking nowadays. 'Hey, do you even care? Or am i just a means to an end!'

sometimes we're invincible to those we love, n its painful. I felt this!
Thanks for sharing, write on!

[Aehr]

Thank you for your review king :D

[Autumn Dawn Ridge]

What every young girl wonders. Good stuff. Keep writing!

[Aehr]

thank you! :) Xx.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

A great and touching piece enjoyed reading it :)
-CDB

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the description and the questions in the poem. The questions of love keep us guessing and hoping. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Rita L. Sev]

A nice bit of romance here, Rhea!

[stars are far]

That was very beautiful work, and well the content was absolutely romantic and lovely, i really liked what you have crafted here, and you know.. life will always give us a chance for love , and that true love's bliss is always a fate.. well done :)