My Saviour

‘Bleed,’ said the devil rising inside my head again

Longing for the unease and the excruciating pain

‘Don’t,’ said a whisper from the inner angel dying

Tired of the hurt, the sadness and the crying

 

The blade was in my hand, ready to cut my skin

The unhappiness waiting to pour out from within

But something kept me, the way it had kept me for days

From hurting myself the way I did in so many ways

 

It made me want to look at the mirror a little longer

Smile a little wider and it made me feel stronger

It made me want to laugh and it made me love life

It made me want to forget about the blades and the knife

 

I don’t know what it was, but it felt so good

I wanted it to last, but didn’t know if it would

It was going perfectly well until once again, I broke

And from that pleasant dream, I woke

 

‘Bleed,’ the devil urged again, and the angel cried

But in a flash of blinding light, the devil simply died

I looked ahead and found what had made me stop

Standing right there, saving me again from the drop

 

And it was him, it was love, that had helped me out

Just by being himself and just by being about

He pulled me out of the nightmare and made me love life

He made me forget about my scars and the knife

Reviews

[Carly]

Nice work here. I like the idea of the devil, the angel and the savior. It's a new approach to the idea of self harm.

[TL Boehm]

amen. he made me forget about my scars and the knife. Well penned.

[Flutterby aish]

I am sorry i know i am late.....however i had read it at school n as i said bestie it's amazing! U r a great writer n keep writing, never underestimate ur self n ..... love life!!!!!

[Aehr]

you know JUST what I'm feeling don't you? lol thanks dear x

[Aehr]

you know JUST what I'm feeling don't you? lol thanks dear x

[Suditi]

Wow. Such a beautifully written piece. Gives me goosebumps.

[Laura Harrison]

This is such an inspiring poem, one that I think will help other's suffering from self-harm

[Penny]

Well.. i can't quote my fav. Line coz den i've 2 copy d whole poem:-P But d story in d text & hw u put it in aa subtle rhyme.. luv it!!

[Coyote Poetry]

"And it was him, it was love, that had helped me out
Just by being himself and just by being about
He pulled me out of the nightmare and made me love life
He made me forget about my scars and the knife"
I like the above lines. We must know misery and pain to know kindness and love. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[AleyshaRosa]

I'm just.... astounded. Simply because I understand completely. The words, the feeling couldn't have been said better.
I appreciated the repeat in rhythm between the first and last stanza. I felt the initial dying "no"... and the grasp for life and relief on the last.

Koodoos

[Layla J Omorose]

I didn't read this so much as a poem but as a short story. The rhymes didn't hit me till the last two stanzas. So i went back a reread the poem. (That part was my fault lol). There were no pauses in the poem and if it was read out loud it would be rushed and hurried. I think if you added periods or commas or some punctuation indicating a pause at the end of the line it would have flowed better. I do like the concept of the poem however and liked how you related the last stanzas to the first one.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Nice flow, rhymes. It's very emotional, truthful, hopeless at the beginning and so on but hopeful at the end. Yep, a person who saved you, from the devil. I had the same bullshit as you. So I know how it feels. Thanks for sharing. :D

[Aehr]

Lol this isn't based on personal experience. I've just been reading about and talking to a lot of people who self hurt or used to lately.
Thanks a lot though. I'm glad you're out of this s**t now. :)

[R.A. Youngblood]

Oh, sorry. :P You're welcome and thanks. :D

[Aehr]

:) haha no problem.