Facepack Burns

My face on fire

With every dab, it spreads on

My helpless hands know its for the best

And that the pain will soon be gone

I fan my face for some sort of relief

But my skin tightens as I wince in pain

As I long for something to wash it away - 

Clear tap water or even the rain

'Its not medicine,' I remind myself,

'It'll be gone before you know'

So I just sit there without complaining at all, 

And force a straight face for show

I continue to stare at my green painted face

To scowl in agony at my reflection

And wait for the herbs to work their magic

And polish my face to perfection

Author's Note

I'm incredibly sorry if this poem sucks, but I've written this after a huge poetry block, and I honestly can't stop laughing at myself. :D :D :D
Thoughts?

Reviews

[Moon]

Beauty is pain and I myself hate it! lol. Sometimes I just say to myself, "Forget the crummy make-up and eyebrow waxing, I am just going to be myself today and if people don't like how my face looks without me putting in all that unneeded work then boo-hoo to them !" Nice poem and it made me giggle as well. It was a joy to read. Thank you for sharing :)

[Carly]

Coming from someone who has done incredibly painful things for beauty, I find this very relatable. I like how you include the reflection at the end.

[AleyshaRosa]

Contrary to your belief this poem doesn't suck! It's real sooo very true lol =P I like the simplicity of the topic and how you made it poetic with a casual backdrop.


Thanks for sharing =]

Koodoos

[Aehr]

Hahaha thank you Aleysha :P A writer's block can really cause you to end up writing some crazy stuff! :D

[AleyshaRosa]

Hahaha true story =P

[BlahBlahBlah]

It's not at all bad!! Don't worry, you've written an entertaining and short and cute poem! And may I say ye cheez badi hai mast mast, yeh cheez badi hai mast. Wow, I sound creepy! Anyways, this is what happens whenyou study too much maths =D oh and, cool poem!

[Aehr]

lol :P
thank you :)

[luna11]

It's amazing how you can write something so lovely and effective out of something as trivial as this :) Really enjoyed it!

[Fairytale]

This is cute! It's got a simple theme; and ordinary circumstance that many can relate to in some way. This reminds me of poison ivy, or something like that. So cute, and enjoyable. Thank you for this read:)

[stars are far]

that was amazinggg ...well done

[Flutterby aish]

Beauty comes with pain in the a*s!!! ;p Rhea.....this is Brilliam as well as phenomeniall n AMAZAYNNNN!!!!

[Aehr]

Pain in the a*s from standing in front of the mirror, and burns on the face from the herbs! Thanks a tonne sistaaa :D

[annabellee]

it doesn't suck at all. really nice description. I liked it a lot. Well done :)