Don't Make Me Go To Sleep

I see hideous people with shiny sharp knives,

And a mob of people running for their lives

And darkness and wicked laughter echoing all around

Sometimes, screams are the only sound

 

I see houses burning, and dying birds

And old people fumbling for their last words

And windows banging hard, and breaking glass

And sometimes even blood spilled on the grass

 

Every night is a nightmare, something I hate to see

I try to tell the truth, but no one believes me

I rather stay up all night, forced to wail and weep,

Believe me mother, please don’t make me go to sleep

Author's Note

Sometimes, parents think that kids are lying. Little do they know that it's not ALWAYS true...

Reviews

[Reeti]

Here's a unique verse narrated by the outlet of a child. I think it's wise to know the existent wickedness of this world, but it's not clever to muse in it. The trauma at a tender age tends to live on for a lifetime. In many cases, the adults who have faced the brutality in childhood end up with violent dispositions.

The cloak of ignorance does appease sufferers, but parents or guardians are responsible for adhering to the truth and also recognizing honesty in those who mean to them most.

The imagery has been vividly portrayed in Gothic mode of writing with the eyes and ears of a young. There is innocence in the tone of the child narrator especially in the end. It makes we wish that he/she saves his/her sanity before it's too late. Sorry if i have moralized too much. =)

[Aehr]

thank you so much for your review Reeti :)

[wunder]

~wow-very haunting-within such a touching
scheme~ & it's very magnificently emotional!!!~

[Aehr]

thank you :)

[wunder]

~my pleasure~ :)

[annabellee]

loved it. I loved the image you used here, so sad but fitting. I always enjoy your poems, again gorgeous piece :)

[Aehr]

thank you! :D

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Real wisdom in the poor. We need to listen to our kids. Assist them with their fear and give them confident. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[gwendolyn]

You have some great lines that were executed well. Though I thought you could have pushed it a bit darker, over all it is good. There is a lot I like about it, especially your descriptions. My advice to you would be to push your complexity, to really get a shiver in the readers. I think you are very capable of doing it extremely well!

[Aehr]

thank you for the advice :D Of course, there is always room for improvement!

[Flutterby aish]

Ok.............sweetheart are u alright? I hope you are not having dreams as bad as the poem depicts.......if so.......tell me! Other than that.......the poem is incredibly awesome! The lines and words are so clear ......the picture they create is really horrific! Well rhea ....... great job done here!

[Aehr]

ty sis :D I told you, I'm fine, though I was having bad dreams...

[Flutterby aish]

yup! n welcome!

[Rita L. Sev]

This reads like true horror, very vivid and dark. Good flow and rhyme, excellent job with the imagery. Well done, Rhea!

[Aehr]

thank you Rita!

[The Fallen]

Very nice write. I do agree with you that parents always believe that children are lying. Haunting and dark write, that I can see in my head. Awesome job.

[Aehr]

thank you!

[Arun]

the inner side of your thoughts usher the innocence fear of a child's dream..more or less seems to be somewhat real experience...only real feelings can give depth to your writing
the only thing i felt about your poem is it ended abruptly. You could have steered the poem to somewhat origin of the fear like what the child fears about and why the elders couldn't see that on her face, an addition of two more paras could have done wonders. Good work Rhea

[Aehr]

thank you so much for your views. :D