Remember The Roses

It's from the point of view of a boy. I just thought I'd give it a try.

Remember when you were twelve,

And were suffering from some disease?

The boy who left you roses, 

Was forever and always me

And remember when you turned sixteen,

And the man you loved broke your heart?

The boy who left you daisies

Was always me from the very start

Oh, and when you turned twenty,

And your Mommy passed away

The one who left you jasmines

Was always me, everyday

And then when you turned twenty four

And married the other man who loved you

I was the one who left you daisies again

And I cried all day under the blue

And then you left the city at twenty eight

I was the man who left you roses at that time

And in the grief of your leaving

It was me who left you that rhyme

Remember me, my love? I was always by your side

But now I see your eyes close

And I just hope you keep me with you

And remember me with this last rose

Author's Note

This is from the point of view of a boy. I really wanted to write from the point of view of a guy once, and I'm glad that I wrote this poem. Again, it's after a long spell...
Reviews are appreciated :)

Reviews

[annabellee]

oh that's such a cute and sad poem. I loved the emotions in this one. And the idea with the flowers is very creative. I think you're very talented, I really enjoy reading your poems :)

[Aehr]

aww... thank you! :)

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and sad poem. Flower do symbol memories and thoughts. I like the use of flowers to make your point in the poem. I like the complete poem. A strong ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Kashif Waqas Ramay]

i think this one lacks thrill, piercing power into heart. which can carry someone in his past... may be boy is the expressor that is why....:)
anyhow good try

[Aehr]

I guess so. I haven't ever written from a male's point of view :) Thank you for reviewing!

[TL Boehm]

A melancholy write - I think it does well displaying unrequited love and mourning - Its a strong theme - we are often drawn to things and people we can't have - we romanticize it - and the fantasy becomes more real than the reality - this poem seems to allude to that.

[Flutterby aish]

WOW!!!!! Nice one.....i think it was a nice try (writing from a boy's point of view)!!! Like always..........you again bought justice to the idea by putting it in such beautiful words!!!

[Aehr]

thank you! :)

[Layla J Omorose]

This was a poem that flowed well for the most part. The last line in the 4th stanza didn't seem to fit with the rest of that stanza for me. The blue what? or where they blue from sadness? I like how you tell the boys story even though he seems like a stalker. It is still a beautiful love story. Unrequited love and I wonder if she knew that he loved her that much. Beautiful write.

[Criss ;)]

What kinda hell you are....?
I loved first stanza and last stanza as well...because you well mentioned and walked through love, joy and pain.
i loved this piece, this's so truth writing and in first stanza you talked and mentioned about love and love and in ending at last you expressed the pain pain and only pain, you really well thought in a point of guys...i meant for good guys...:)
lovely write, it's very romantic one.....
have this from my heart 1000 / 100 :)

[Aehr]

thank you! :)

[Rhea752]

Aww that is so beautiful and sad. I wish someone did that for me. Nicely written Rhea keep it up!!!!!!

[Aehr]

thank you :)

[Rita L. Sev]

This is such a lovely tale of undying affection! Well-written and poignant.