Judged.

the full stop after the title is deliberate :)

Sometimes a little spark in life is required

To make you feel better, and a little inspired

Sometimes you need to think out of the blue

To get something different, something totally new

 

And I was doubtful at first, but I gave it a try

I gave it a shot, and I didn't even know why

I found pleasure in doing it, just the basic fun

I never thought it would change from what it was into a run

 

I asked some wrong questions, made bad choices

It added up to sadness, and echoing voices

It all ended up to this, people judging me

Trapped in a mirror, and that’s all I can see

 

Trapped in a mirror, where I see just my flaws

My flaws they pick out according to their laws

I’m judged now for doing what I absolutely love

And their comments act like blessings from above

 

And once again, I feel like a bird afraid to fly

And I’m scared that they’ll say things even if I cry

So now I’ll stay silent, because I’m scared of what they think

And the sea of the victims is where I’m going to sink

 

 

 

Author's Note

We all feel judged. Don't we? :/
(This has been written after another dry spell, so please be honest, and bear with me if it isn't that good)
Have a good day!
The picture is actually mine :P

Reviews

[Thea]

"I asked some wrong questions, made bad choices
It added up to sadness, and echoing voices
It all ended up to this, people judging me
Trapped in a mirror, and that’s all I can see"
I especially loved this verse because I can pretty much relate to it. It's a little frustrating to know that people can just easily judge you without much knowledge. I've been there before. It's difficult overcoming this kind of feeling. They say trust. But how do you trust when you feel like the world is against you? Sometimes, it's just not fair. It's a battle that is not easy to conquer - a path that traces an indefinite road.

This was full of melancholy and emotions. I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing, eh? :)

[Sasha]

Wow..
One great poem!
Loved it !

[Coyote Poetry]

Life teaches us to be kinder and more gentle.
"Trapped in a mirror, where I see just my flaws
My flaws they pick out according to their laws
I’m judged now for doing what I absolutely love
And their comments act like blessings from above"
No perfect people. Just people doing their best. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Flutterby aish]

An amazing poem.......loved the rhymes and the idea of the poem......an amazing one like always!!! ;)

[Aehr]

thank you. :)

[TL Boehm]

So now I’ll stay silent, because I’m scared of what they think
And the sea of the victims is where I’m going to sink
Yes, I think we all feel judged and we all get to the place where the writer is in the last two lines. But we don't stay there because we simply cannot.
I don't think the poem is rusty - although I know how it is to be dormant and then start up. You "Feel" rusty but we don't see it like that.
A thoughtful, melancholy poem

[KAin]

Excellent work here.
There were a few lines in the poem that threw the rhythm off a little...

"And I was doubtful at first, but I gave it a try
I gave it a shot, and I didn't even know why"

Maybe in that second line, you could remove the word "even"? It was a moment here and there in the poem, where a misplaced word took away just a little from it...

But, just reading the poem for what it was, this is excellent work, with a good message, poignant for many people.
I've seen people paralyzed by fear of judgment, unable to do what they want because they're worried of what others will think of them.

A great poem. Keep it up!

[Aehr]

Thank you, Landred. I'll have a look at the poem once more. :)

[KAin]

Keep up the good work :) I'll check out more of your work soon.

[Aehr]

Oh that would be great. :)

[khalid]

very nicely penned. and yes, we are all judged in some way..i liked the images, the words picking as well as the picture..

[Aehr]

thank you.

[Kashif Waqas Ramay]

And the sea of the victims is where I’m going to sink.....:(
good one

[Aehr]

thanks :)

[Rhea752]

I hate being judged. That's why I don't say much around "real" people. Well done. Well written. Keep it up!!! :D

[Aehr]

Yea. I hate "real" people. :) thank you.

[Emrick]

This poem has touched my heart. The ryhmes are very nice and the theme though sad it's cool.
I will only tell you this my friend : You achieve according to what you believe.So keep going.

[Aehr]

thank you, both for the review and the advice :) I really appreciate it.