Like A Supernova

He was like a supernova,

When his end was near

He held me by my arm

And whispered in my ear:

 

‘I know my time has come

Any moment, I shall leave

But please be strong my dear

For me, don’t you ever grieve

 

For I am going to a place

Far beyond your eyes can see

That’s what’s written in my fate

My dear, that’s destiny’

 

Philosophies explain the importance

And the significance of death,

The value of every second

The price of every breath

 

And he was like a supernova

Exploding, taking the fall

Whispering me a message,

Crumbling, loosing it all

Author's Note

Note = I’ve written this for my Grandpa. I don’t know, we weren’t all that close, and none of this ever happened, but I think we would’ve gotten along. All I know is that when he was breathing his last, he took my Grandma’s name as well as mine. He loved me a lot, and I did to. I miss him.

Reviews

[Pankaj Lohia]

U write really well.. And you've used nice phrases to get the point across.. Brilliant

[patti]

that is beautiful poem, it sad and hard to lose someone but as he has said, everyone has destinies that one day we will all meet them

[Rhianne Ney]

Philosophies explain the importance
And the significance of death,
The value of every second
The price of every breath

And he was like a supernova
Exploding, taking the fall
Whispering me a message,
Crumbling, loosing it all

These are my favorite lines~!

Great on imagery and words

100/100

[PurpleQuartz]

I'm sorry about your loss. Losing someone is never easy.
Its a beautiful poem, and I like the simile you used.

[Androglossia]

Philisophical and is clearly coming from the depths of your being. Beautiful write.

[Laura Maidah]

I like the repetition of the first and last stanza.

[Layla J Omorose]

This was a very nice piece for your grandfather. Death is apart of life and something we all will face one day. With that being said the poem didn't grip me and pull me in. I was a little put off with the rhyming lines and the ones in between. It disrupted the flow of the poem for me. I think you should either try to stick with the rhyme or not at all. I think with a little time you can develop this into a better piece.

[Coffee Vampier]

its a beautiful peace to remember him by, quite lovely. They flow is endless, finished as it was i was expecting more due to how liquid the read was. Very well done. I am sorry about your loose. Death is just the beginning of a new life :)

[Aehr]

i agree. Death, according to me, is made up of two words: DEstiny and brEATH. Acc. to me, it literally means Destiny's last breath. The soul then travels to another body.
Thank you :D

[keyvan]

Exploding, taking the fall........very nice

[beautiful dreamer]

wow this is wonderful. i'm sorry about your grandfather

[Aehr]

thank you. he died two years ago, but i miss him

[Prabhat Mishra]

touching piece..