Leaving

My lucky shirt tucked in my bag

And a crumpled set of notes

Mary gifted me a pack of cards

And a book on motivational quotes

My teachers say that they'll miss me

And the jokes that I made in class

Brittle memories threatening to fall

And break into pieces like glass

My lover knows I'm going

He says that he'll follow me out

I'll never forget our times together

I'll really miss him a lot

I'm drowning in my packed bags

A sinking feel comes creeping in

The first time I'm leaving on my own

Leaving without my friends or kin

My lucky shirt in my bag

Miserable is what it is

But then my lover comes around,

And delights me with a kiss

Small town girl leaving home

A minute ago, alone

But now her lover's at her side

And they're walking out the door

Author's Note

Reviews please?

Reviews

[A. V. Madison]

Packed with emotion. The feelings i felt when i left Sacramento to live in Los Angeles. Exceptional read, really made me feel emotional reading it (could be that i'm just a girl, and anything makes me emtional! Ha!) Thanks for sharing.

[Flutterby aish]

Mmhmmmmmmm.......lover........you mean the guy who gives me diabetes.........ya sure.........u knw wt lets change the plan.........hw bou he goes n u stay?????? Grreat idea na.........i won't even hv to take pills to cure my diabetes then!hahaha!!!!!BTW grrrrreat write as alwys!!!!!!!

[Aehr]

yea... u hate Mr. Diabetes from the core of your heart right? Hehe, can't blame you :P

[Flutterby aish]

:p..........na..........actually........he's nt dat bad also!!!!!! Atleast u make better choices than me!!!!!!!

[Aehr]

oho, sentimental auntae.... :P

[Rhianne Ney]

Whoa, this is cute. Great going there ("

[PurpleQuartz]

I really liked the story in this! Great write!

[Akshita]

I liked the starting, but it kind of dropped in the middle for me...but in the ending it got up again....so all's well that ends well..overall it's a nice poem :)

[patti]

well done good write indeed. Is scary to move out and face the big world on your own which i can relate but i like the ending that things turns out for good. Just shows everything has good ending no matter how scary the beginning is.

[Hester Vane]

Great stuff! I love the message in this piece as I can relate to it heavily at this moment in my life! Brilliant.

[Reeti]

There is a sweet, euphonious rhythm to this verse. I'm not sure which rhythmic meter has been used. But, it's definite that the effect of your rhyming has enriched the quality of your verse. However simple the story-line is, the narrative style does not fail to induce nostalgia.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice ending to the poem. Hard to move and be alone. I like how things ended up alright in the end. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[junaid altaf]

well leaving is nature..
you keep on leaving the passing seconds, breaths,heart beats and so on............
well lives in the lap of future!
moreover well written!