Flutter by, Butterfly

First Haiku!!!

Flutter by, oh little one

Your wings bring my soul to life

Bring color to my world

Author's Note

My first haiku. I tried to follow the 5-7-5 rule, and I have no idea how this on is. Reviews please!!!

Reviews

[Craba]

awe this is so wonderful, Very nicely written.

[deepblue04]

this is good for a first haiku! these poems are a little harder to work....

[Coyote Poetry]

Nothing as beautiful as a butterfly. Make us wish to fly and be free. Very good description in the excellent poem.
Coyote

[afra]

simply beautiful ....love it

[Violet Dreams...]

Short but sweet

[MOON]

Lovely feel to the write.

[Zainab UF]

This wonderful work may not be a haiku, technically, but it has the soul of one.

Haiku in English do not have to strictly follow the 5-7-5 (syllables, not words) but the syllable count do not exceed seventeen. But the important thing is you captured the essence of a haiku - conveying much in as little as possible - on your very first attempt. And for that, my dear, I give you a standing ovation! :)

[J. J. Nightingale]

First line 7 second line 7 .. last line 6 .. Still light and beautiful .. softly ..

Jazz

[Soul Fire]

Beautiful

[Lina Grey]

Well, it doesn't follow 5-7-5, it follows 6-7-6. You're counting syllables, my dear. Besides that technical error, it's very nice, has a sort of calming feeling to it. I like the picture too.