What the Lover Sees

The lover smells her perfume

He watches her splendid rhythm 

As she sways away into oblivion

Her face purer than a lily 

And as fragile as glass

Her serene, graceful body

Two amazingly beautiful eyes

So delicate, so dignified,

Yet so merciful

Reviews

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I saw you were in one of the same contest as me so I checked out the poem and it really is very lovely Rhea! :-) It;s simple and short and powerful. I love that type of power in a poem.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

Blimey I really fancy this lady!

Which means you have done a fab job with this poem!

TopRated 100

[Aehr]

thanks!

[Corset]

She sounds so lovely, through a loves eyes we are all made as beautiful as she.

[Aehr]

yes we are! Thank you!

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awww~ Short, sweet and simple. I love this. It's so delicate... like an angel it seems. =)
Great job with the use of your words!

[Aehr]

aww.. thank you!

[Sleeping Maiden]

no problem at all~ =)

[Tai Ryens]

I already know which contest you entered, hehe . . . Clever use of words though.

[Aehr]

thank you Ryan.. did you enter the contest too?

[Tai Ryens]

Just did, yesterday I believe.

[AK]

Wow! This poem is brilliant! I saw those elusive keywords, and you weaved a beautiful poem out of it! A very difficult task too! I loved this poem:)) keep writing!

[Lena Rossmore]

It's such a beautiful poem; the images it conjurers up in my face are so breathtaking! Amazing!

[Aehr]

thank you!

[Helen Crutchett]

Rhea, once again thank you for participating in the contest. Beautiful poem, using the given words so wonderfully! I know its not easy, but you did it with flying colours!

[Aehr]

thank you!!

[I Shred This Cabbage]

excellent effort!

i entered the same contest so i know how difficult it was!

Her face purer than a lily
And as fragile as glass

great link of words :)

[Aehr]

thanks!

[Harley (arbiter)]

That was pretty good actually. I liked it

[Aehr]

you did? I thought it was just on-the-spot made non sense.... But, I still wanted to share it...

[Harley (arbiter)]

Lol glad you did