One Fatal Look

One look

And her beauty paralyses you

One look

And you drown in her eyes

One look 

And you stiffen like stone

The slithering sound invites you

To sneak just one peek 

To see the almond shaped saucers

Holding the poisonous beauty within...

 

Her eyes, they kill you

Turn you as cold as ice

Those divine and fragile eyes

You won't even realize...

Death will capture you 

Just one look...

Author's Note

This poem is inspired by the Greek myth of Medusa, which says that one look in her beautiful eyes paralyzed anyone into stone, even though her face was ugly.

Reviews

[Lena Rossmore]

Wow! This is beautifully written! The poetic devices are carved into the poem so well! Truly remarkable.

[Aehr]

thank you so much!

[Owlgirl]

Wow! Great job! I love the tone! I read the whole thing in a whisper and it just like made the atmostphere, amazing!

[J. J. Nightingale]

There are a few like Medusa out there .. Beauty isn't the only draw, it is an aura ... Once smitten, forever lost, in those eyes that paralyse .. ... Death comes in many forms... and I like the way you express the danger ...

Good one ! .. Jazz

[LittleLover]

I love it! the flow was nice and i love how you did some repetition. Very nice, loved it1 Great job!!!!

[Aehr]

thanks!!

[LittleLover]

no problem! im trying to read a lot of your poems and review, your a really good writer!

[Aehr]

aawww.. thanks! you'r really good yourself!

[LittleLover]

thanks!

[Sleeping Maiden]

Oooo...this is really nice! =) i love it! you captured it quite well.
Medusa's story is always interesting! Great job!

[Aehr]

thanks Lalaine!

[Layla J Omorose]

Oh ok it was a good that you had the authors's note because I thought to myself "how do eyes slither?" lol....but moving on the second line in the poem says "the" instead of "their". The poem was good but I think it could be better. This seems like it could be an outline of a great poem. I didn't think about Medusa either when I read the poem, I agree with the other review that you might want to add some snake imagery or more of the myth into the poem.I am not a fan for color text either and I felt this particular blue color was too bright for the darkness of the poem. Maybe a darker blue. But I did like the poem. I just think it has the potential to be more

[Aehr]

sure.. thanks!

[Aehr]

Shivers! I see you read the myth of Medusa, yes.... oh gosh, you did a very well job!

E.L.

[Aehr]

thanks ....

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. The myths allow us to reach in and find story of power and fear. The woman who could capture you with one look is a dangerous person. I enjoyed the tale and the very good ending. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[R.A. Youngblood]

Creepy! I thought it was about love or something at the first two stanzas, till i read the last one.
Yeah, it reminded me too about that medusa, there's a film about it, Perci Jackson, check it out, it's awesome.
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up buddy :D

[Aehr]

yea.. i know, i've seen it like.. uncountable times.. and i've read all the books in the Percy Jackson series!

[Aehr]

thanks, by the way!

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, it's scary. When i was watching Percy Jackson for the first time, i was like "Please, don't open your eyes! NOOO!!" lol
You're welcome :D

[Aehr]

haha.. i know, gave me the chills too when I saw it for the first time.. It's an awesome movie... Hey do you have any idea when the 2nd is gonna release? Its called 'Percy Jackson and the Olympians : The Sea of Monsters' Any idea?

[R.A. Youngblood]

I don't know, unfortunately. I'm asking people around do they know, but they don't. :/....so impatient...

[Aehr]

i know.. can't wait!!! the trailer said 'January 2012' but obviously, that date's gone.. UHH!!!! can't wait at all!!!!

[R.A. Youngblood]

Yeah, it really sucks to wait so much! :P
I can sympathize with you, as you can see. xD

[Aehr]

yea.. i can see that :P

[GunMetal]

Chilling. Good font choice and color. It definitely added to the coldness you were trying to convey. Nicely done.