Coming To You

Drowning into darkness

Drowning in the sea

Drowning into hopelessness

With you coming nearer to me

Even though I'm dying

I'm happy to let go

Even though I'm crying

My happiness doesn't show

For one last breath

Will lead me to you

One last breath

And I can be with you

With your arms in mine

And mine in yours

My long-lost dream will come true

I will be forever with you

Reviews

[Reeti]

there's such a melodious tone of voice in your poem. the rhythmic quality, the poignant feel and the intensity of desire have been reflected by your poem with complete earnestness. at the end, it comes as a bit of a shock according to how i comprehend it. "My long-lost dream will come true; I will be forever with you." That, i think, is to say once the lover returns, both lovers will die in each other's arms (?). it's extreme and has a poetic, tragic end indeed although the reader can sense a great relief felt by the speaker throughout the poem.

[Summer'sBreeze]

Once again I am stunned by your beautiful works, Rhea.
Truely wonderful.
Love it. :)))

[Aehr]

thank you!

Such a haunting and a yearning... I felt your pain, sometimes when we never expect things they happen, and it will be right before us. Nice job!

E.L.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the flow of the poem and the powerful emotion and desire in the words. The poem had a desperate feel with a positive ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Rhea752]

amazingly written. beautiful. sad. lovely. keep writing. :) 100%

[afra]

awwwwwwww ..so sad but sweet at the same time...well done

[Sleeping Maiden]

Gosh, how i loved this! Tragic...but romantic as well....
it does remind me of romeo and juliet.... too...
I love it!!!!!! Great job!!

[Sami Khalil]

Romeo and juliet. Good write.

[AK]

Oh my god! this poem is amazing! I really loved the aura created by this poem, it is the same aura created by the picture! Amazing my dear! I am stunned!
*100*

[Aehr]

thank you so much AK, I'm happy you liked it! And its all because of your contest!!! :)

[AK]

Hehe:) it gets better and better the more I read it. I loved the rhyming scheme! The second stanza is stuck in my head;)

[Aehr]

lol... that happens sometimes! Thanks again! :)

[AK]

:) I love talking to you

[Aehr]

that's a mutual thought between both of us AK :) :)

[AK]

Glad to know:)

[Abbie]

hmm, very good poem I like it. the rhyme scheme worked great hear in this. and for some reason, this poem reminds me of Romeo and Juliet by Shakespeare....

[Aehr]

yea thanks.. I can see how it reminded you of Romeo and Juliet...

[Abbie]

welcome! and I dunno how I got romeo and juliet though.....just another random thought...