When...

When...

A Poem by Rhea752
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sometimes i'm scared to share my writing because i think you guys won't like it, or i'm afraid to share a certain part of my past and i worry. but it's always worth it. thank you for all the support.

"
When you can't write
About what truly matters
Because you're scared that
Life would simply shatter. 
When you can't fully 
Explain your past 
Like not being able 
To take off a cast. 
When you're afraid that
Your life is crumbling 
That you're in ruins
It's like you're tumbling. 
When you hate yourself 
For getting lost
In those memories
And you pay the cost. 
When you read those stories 
And you think 
It's not so hard 
The ship won't sink.
When you try 
So hard to write 
And it all pours out 
Clearing your sight. 
When you destroy 
Your simple stories 
And fear comes back 
To fill you with worry. 
When you are scared 
Just use this tip 
Take the risk 
And jump the ship.

© 2012 Rhea752


Author's Note

Rhea752
thank you once again for reviewing and supporting me and my writing.

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I like your flow and choice of words, your grammar spelling is alright.
And don't worry, we like it! (: ... I have no problem with following, but your lines are not so well connected, i'm not saying you should do this in a free verses, but it's not so pure, if you don't understand me, nevermind. But the feelings are clear and kinda heavy frustrating, and you can literally read what's exactly happening, that's good. All in all, poem is wonderful!
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


wow, the emotional turmoil is an artful interpretation of the downtrodden,
combined angst, liberation and release, remarkable form and flow.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this. I often feel like this. Keep writing :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


A lovely piece; very inspirational! No pointless words or lines; very easy to follow. Simple yet speaking of a grand idea. Love it!
~The Wilted Rose

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Rhea752
Rhea752

Middle Of My Daydreams, FL



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I am a 15 year old girl who loves to read, write, act, and draw. I just started writing seriously about 2 years ago. I've been published a few times in small online magazines. I am trying to find out .. more..

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