Lost Devotion

This is actually based of a real event in my life. Are you proud of me? My sister left my me and my other sister and my parents got a divorce.

Lost devotion in her eyes 

Leaves her sisters 

While they cry 

Once like silver 

Now like glass 

Gone all winter 

Glass is cracking 

Girls forgotten 

Parents fighting 

Family shattered

Anger crackling 

Heart in tatters 

Lost in shadows 

Trail of light 

The sisters followed 

New world sadder 

Then she calls them 

Cannot love her

Author's Note

Sorry the poem's such a mess.

Reviews

[Lina Grey]

This poem's not a mess. It's a beautifully crafted piece reflecting the pain which you were forced to endure, and it really is impressive. Depressing, hopeless, and deep, despite simplicity. Sad what one must brave through, despite the consequences and situations. You captured the concept very well. Thank you.

[Revery]

desperation for love and acceptance from those we need it most from. Who will love me is such a central deep seated question that echos within all of our souls.

[Tai Ryens]

The poem isn't a mess, it comes together nicely, in my opinion. I love how the thoughts are all over the place, it expresses the confusion and the inability to grasp the situation which you are placed in. well done.

[Amanda]

I like the 4th stanza