The Dark

I feel quite trapped I must say

Just like a predator’s prey

 

Shivering and cowering in the night

I stay crouched on my toes ready for flight

 

The long grass that covers me 

Sways ever so slightly

 

It bends with the wind

As I try to stay completely stiff

 

I close my eyes, but just a little too late

And in my mind I see what I truly hate

 

I see the night ready to swallow me in its everlasting wake

Lost in the darkness I struggle to stay opaque  

Author's Note

ignore grammar problems, and tell me what you think

Reviews

[Lina Grey]

"Lost in the darkness I struggle to stay opaque"
Love that line^^
This is a great poem. It's very dark, and dripping with fear. The ending is very powerful and this is a great representation of your amazing talent. Thank you.

[Ezekiel Silver]

Great poem! I love the writing structure and the imagery you put in it. Keep up the good work!!!

[Cathy Wattam]

Great imagery here. Another very good poem. Keep 'em coming........

[CrimsonBlaze]

Tell me what I THINK? This was a lovely dark poem dear. You're a very talented poet. Keep going dear. Because clearly, you've got the talent and knack for it.

[Rayne Murray]

LOVE

[Pikachu]

The imagary in this is just lovely. (: It's very clear that you have a passion.

Kepp it up. :p

[Priscilla Sayers]

My, my, such a feeling we share! You have written this piece, this emotion, beautifully! I love the words you choose, the flow, everything!

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

very touching and very well described..words are shine with the depth of your feelings....