Done Today

The ebbing tide in my veins 

Wane away

The constant pain in my life

Fades away

Trickling slowly my life has

Gone away

Smiling, I no longer have to

Run away

Reviews

[Lina Grey]

...is this about suicide? is it wrong that I automatically think of that? Do you need a lighthouse? I'll be your lighthouse. Seriuosly, just message me if you need to hun. This is a good poem, but it's depressing. This, and Scarlet Flower, and Rainbow, and Happiness, all so depressing. It hurts me to read these and think that that's what you're going through, even though I've never actually met you and don't know all that very well. Please don't give up, don't hurt yourself, just don't. It'll get better, it really will babe.

[Rhea752]

It's ok. I don't. This was written in the perspective of a friend. I've been trying to understand her situation.

[Lina Grey]

okay, that's a relief. well, about you anyway. Hope your friend feels better :P

[Blue Belle]

I like how short and simple it is while conveying a great message. Take Care! Stay Strong! :)

[Tai Ryens]

These are the very screams echoing through the mind of a suicidal; and assuming you aren't or haven't been suicidal; you've captured the very resonating voice flawlessly. It whispers the very fears of a suicidal person; without addressing any simple problems to the point. Perfect.

[Rhea752]

Thank you very much

[Angelic_Dreamer]

Very short I still loved it though but maybe if their were a few more extra lines it would be even more enjoyable

[Rhea752]

Thx

[Angelic_Dreamer]

ur welcome