That Wall

I'm trapped behind that old stone wall 

Pounding away 

Pounding away 

Shouting, screaming out for help 

Somebody help 

Somebody help 

I'm stuck alone for now 

Alone in the world 

Alone in the world 

No-one cares enough to come 

Nobody cares 

Nobody cares 

I'm trapped behind that old stone wall 

Pounding away 

Pounding away 

I'm stuck alone today 

And nobody knows 

Nobody knows

Author's Note

... sorry

Reviews

[Caradoc]

While reading this I couldn't help but picture in my mind what it must have been like for the character of Fortunato in Edgar Allen Poe's, The Cask of Amontillado. If you've never read it, the character was coldly bricked in to a wall within the wine cellar of the main character of the story.

Though I know this poem is more metaphorical, it captures that feeling well.

-Caradoc

[Rhea752]

Thank you for the review :D

[Matt Evans]

Oh man, that would be such a drag! Stuck forever. But perhaps this is meant as in you feel mentally trapped behind a stone wall, like you feel like you can't express yourself to others? Either way it evokes great emotion, and i enjoyed it!

[Rhea752]

all i need are books, papers, and pencils and i'd be set for life :P i actually would prefer it that way :D

[Sarah W. French]

I actually started reading it aloud. Yelling at parts and whispering the repeated lines.

[Rhea752]

i hope you liked it :) Thanks for the review ;P

[Sarah W. French]

Loved it of course!

[Felecia]

Why you're sorry....I'd like to know. This is a fantastic poem. I instantly connected with it. Wonderful. I love it.

[Rhea752]

Thank you very much :D

[Felecia]

You're very welcome :D

[Heromen Selena]

The repetition is nice. However I think it's slightly over done. The image you put in my mind also reminded me of the Egar Allen Poe's poem as well. What ever is going on in your life, I'm sure that there is someone out there who cares enough to help. You'll break that wall and leave it in the dust :) Good job.

[Rhea752]

this wasn't about me :P it was about a friend... she's stuck in a bad place right now. she's getting a little better though :D Thank you for the review :)

[Heromen Selena]

You're welcome. Same thing applies to your friend however.

[Freedom's Child]

I like the use of old stone wall as the main imagery and great emotion to go with it. Good work.

[Rhea752]

Thank you, I appreciate the review

[Tai Ryens]

Why apologize? You've crafted fine lyrics, and haunting as well depending on the mental state of the reader. Well done.

[Rhea752]

Thank You

[MOON]

Poignant lyrical write trying to break out.

[Irvette Dauphine]

like it.. i read it while singing it :)

[Rhea752]

i am glad you enjoyed it :)

[Amanda]

I quite like it. I hope you feel less alone :)

[Rhea752]

thank you