Rain

Worries are lost 

Your world is stopped 

By blurred time 

And dripping rhymes  

Your face marked with severe lines 

Are smeared into meaningless signs 

Where seconds seem like hours 

And you hold infinite power 

 

There's nothing to fear 

You're no lit up deer 

And emotions slip away 

Into puddles you keep at bay 

Oh, this world of wonder 

I wish I could ponder 

Stay all my days 

But this place is filled with mights and mays 

And soon it will trickle and leak 

And nothing will be left of a world many seek 

I will just have to wait until the next rain 

And endure in between, no not rainbows, but pain

Reviews

[♥ Kinnixk]

Very pretty ^.^

[CHRIS ANDES]

..the thought is complete in itself
=]

[Soul Fire]

Beautiful :)

[MOON]

Lovely imagery the rin cleansing.

[Felecia]

Fantastic. Loved it!

[Freedom's Child]

I love it! Lots emotion with the imagery, I was captured in the beginning and it never let me go. The second stanza is my favorite but I do love the entire poem. Incredible work!

[Heromen Selena]

A bit saddening at the end :( Wonderful poem however. Great details in seeing the picture. It made my worries drip away from the rain I envisioned in my mind. Awesome. Keep it up!

[Dominique]

This was beautiful. I love the emotion in it.

[joshua deathdealer]

Nice flow and feel. I like the flat ending.

[Tai Ryens]

Put aside a couple flaws (most being an interruption with lines either too long or short), and you have an interesting concept to your disposal. Wonderful job.