The Cost

A girl's brother dies. The girl feels that it is the family's fault he died. She goes insane and "pays the cost"

Wrath fills her heart 

And her mind 

Tearing her apart 

Sorrow underneath 

Rage accented 

By grief 

My brother lost 

Not my fault 

They need to pay the cost 

Pay the cost 

The parents sleep 

Unaware of the terror 

Their daughter will soon reap 

My brother lost 

Not my fault 

Pay the cost 

Pay the cost 

She is a shell 

Her soul gone 

When her brother fell 

My brother lost 

Pay the cost 

Pay the cost 

She grabbed a knife 

Her hand prepared 

To take a life 

Brother lost 

Pay the cost 

Pay the cost 

Without asking why 

She plunged the blade

Which was followed by a cry 

Pay the cost 

Pay the cost 

She did this twice 

But not yet satisfied 

She did this thrice 

Pay the cost 

Her mind was lost 

Her life was lost 

To the cost 

Pay the cost 

Pay the cost 

Payed the cost

Reviews

[Owlgirl]

Wow. That is . . . wow. Amazing. The emotion, the fear, the lost, it's amazing. I just. . . wow. . . . awesome.

[Rhea752]

Haha, i love making people say wow. thank you for the review :)

[Owlgirl]

Lol your welcome, it's a great poem!

[Amila Jay]

Wow. an excellent write :))

[F.P. Chat]

Wow, very intense. i like that you repeat the
Brother lost
Pay the cost
I found this very powerful. very beautiful

[Rhea752]

Thank you :)

[Tai Ryens]

Intense indeed, but I do feel that you could have tweaked and improved it more. Just my two cents. Good job, nonetheless.