Broken Mask
A Poem by
Rhea752
I hate putting on This accursed mask
That wears a smile
Every day
Hate pretending
That I'm not crying
Underneath
Hate how nobody sees
The real me
I hate lying
To myself
And my family
Hate feeling
Like I'm nothing
Hate this broken mask
For not fixing everything
I hate me
For willingly wearing
This thing
For not taking it off
And setting myself free
© 2012 Rhea752
Reviews
Great poem. Take Care! Stay Strong! :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
This is pretty much me everyday. I connected to this instantly. I love it. I hate putting on the mask too. Although, sometimes I really want to, but I can't and I fail at it...anyway, I love this poem.
Posted 12 Years Ago
This is pretty much me everyday. I connected to this instantly. I love it. I hate putting on the mask too. Although, sometimes I really want to, but I can't and I fail at it...anyway, I love this poem.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I love the tone you use in your works, this poem is no exception thank you so much for sharing this!
Posted 12 Years Ago
I love the tone you use in your works, this poem is no exception thank you so much for sharing this!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
thank you :D
This is so sad. Very nice however.
Posted 12 Years Ago
This is so sad. Very nice however.
Dark mood, love the ending!
Posted 12 Years Ago
Dark mood, love the ending!
Great write! I like the short, choppy lines... And I don't know if you meant to do this or not, but I like the lack of any sort of punctuation... I was reading it as if the narrator was saying this all in one frantic breath, and at the end there was a gasp for air.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Great write! I like the short, choppy lines... And I don't know if you meant to do this or not, but I like the lack of any sort of punctuation... I was reading it as if the narrator was saying this all in one frantic breath, and at the end there was a gasp for air.
Perfectly worded. It had a good up and down rhythm for me when i read it.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Perfectly worded. It had a good up and down rhythm for me when i read it.
sad.. but incredibly well written! I can relate to this one so much! Its really nice... i like it!
Posted 12 Years Ago
sad.. but incredibly well written! I can relate to this one so much! Its really nice... i like it!
Dark, haunting, relatable, and very well written. I'm not a fan of masks but wear them all the same. Great job, this is amazing.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Dark, haunting, relatable, and very well written. I'm not a fan of masks but wear them all the same. Great job, this is amazing.
I like it, it's dark and sad...my preferred type!
Posted 12 Years Ago
I like it, it's dark and sad...my preferred type!
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Added on July 25, 2012
Last Updated on July 25, 2012
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Rhea752 Middle Of My Daydreams, FL
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I am a 15 year old girl who loves to read, write, act, and draw. I just started writing seriously about 2 years ago. I've been published a few times in small online magazines. I am trying to find out ..
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