Mary Remembered

a story of a family living a lie.

This is the story 

Of a girl who was lost 

In a world full of lies 

When they all payed the cost 

She went to her church 

And prayed to her God 

And always avoided 

The long wooden rod 

But one day befell her 

When tragedy struck 

And her family ran out of 

Every ounce of luck 

Her mother had caught 

The daunting new illness 

That made her cough and choke 

unlike any other sickness 

She gasped and she wheezed 

And soon doubled over 

She died without breath 

For there was no cure 

Her family was shocked  

By her sudden demise 

The girl on the couch, 

She refused to rise 

She wanted to grieve 

She wanted to cry 

But her family just wanted 

To live a big lie 

The sister and father 

Slowly rose off the ground 

Calm and collected  

They uttered this sound 

"It's time for church Mary 

Go put on your dress, 

It starts in five minutes 

Go put on your best" 

Now Mary was shocked 

At the silent agreement 

To completely forget that 

The sickness was sent 

But slowly she rose 

And joined with her family 

Knowing the lie 

That they refused to see 

Her family forgot 

That her mother had died 

"It just was too much" 

The others once sighed 

But Mary remembered 

The whole entire time 

Down till she died 

On the last midnight chime

Reviews

[Owlgirl]

Great job! I like how it tells a story, awesome writing. Poor Mary.

[Rhea752]

heh, thank you :D

[Melody]

This is super sad. :( Great job though, it's beautifully written. :) I love the a-b-c-b rhyming pattern you used it wonderfully.

[Rhea752]

thank you :)

[Thomas Reilly Thornhill]

It's very good and I enjoyed reading it :) The only thing I wasn't fond of the line "And without any gore" I'm not sure why though, it may have been to direct and to the point but meh god overall

[Rhea752]

i just changed that line. i honestly didn't like it either.

[Thomas Reilly Thornhill]

wow yeaah that works far better :) Very nice :D

[Rhea752]

thx