Ink Bleeding

Ink 

Bleeding 

Scratching 

Carving 

A world 

In the stars 

In the sky 

Of your mind 

A Heaven 

And a Hell 

To the writer 

And the reader 

Ink  

Bleeding 

Scratching 
Carving 

Your escape 

Of the heart 

And the soul

Reviews

[Astro MacGuffin]

The third and fourth lines / words did a good job of summarizing the style of this poem. I picture each word as a triumphant attack being scratched against formlessness on a white void, a chiseled and decisive victory.

For some reason I wish "In the sky / Of your mind" was one line despite seeing "A world ... Of your mind" as probably an intended construct. Maybe just for variety's sake. That's not a criticism, just a comment.

The final sense of the poem, for me, was that writing is a desperate race to complete ourselves before we die; that our creativity is a permanent hemorrhage which will spill out of us, either intentionally, or fatally. And I heard the sound of a pen scratching paper with almost every line.

[Rhea752]

Thank you very much Nathan, I appreciate this review

[Felecia]

Very nice. I enjoyed it :)

[Heromen Selena]

awesome!! this was amazing. Love it. Absolutely love it.

[♥ Kinnixk]

Short, simple and elegant. I love it!
100/100

[Melissa]

I love your use of one word lines, it's very creative! :)

[Tai Ryens]

I love how you say that writing is a good bandage for a wound without speaking of the topic directly. You intrigued me and I may as well do something regarding ink soon . . .

[ewest1220]

O.o So much to say with so little words. The action words are the best "Bleeding Scratching, Carving. Great job!

[Celestial Witch Child]

Short and simple in it's perfection. Love it. Great piece. (:

[Owlgirl]

Wow! That was well done! I love the power in the words, it's gorgeous! Awesome job!

[Amanda]

I agree with Elege!!! Great work as always, Rhea!

[Rhea752]

thank you!!!