Thoughts

I am sitting here

My whole life was about helping others

I was told to do the same with myself

Yet i don't know how

I am still doing that today

I have emailed 43 school today

I am looking for donations to send

They are going to the victims of hurricane Mathew

I have only got one reply so far

I am getting kind of bummed

Al i have ever wanted to do

Was help the people around me

Now I am trying yet i still don't get my wish

I feel as if I am failing the thing that I am trying to do

Reviews

[William Liston]

When it comes to helping others, I sometimes find it better to focus on individuals instead of groups. With that being said, I don't donate to charity often, but I do try to do good for people in my life ... it makes my day to see them smile. Sometimes, the nicest things we can do are the simplest ... that includes giving compliments, holding the door, saying "I love you" ... etc. It's great that good-hearted people such as yourself exist; don't let anything discourage you.

- William Liston

[Inject Positivity]

Do you know what is the greatest job in this world? It is to help others... Whenever I have struggled in my life and felt pain I have found that reaching out to those who needs someone to be their frnd makes my life more meaningful... You are such a kind soul and I pray that you find peace inside yourself... Do what you can my frnd, you don't know how many lives you are touching through your kind words...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Vria P Crow]

FIRST IMPRESSIONS

The story reads like a poem which I approve of. I like to see someone experiment with mechanics of writing. You may enjoy a young adult novelist, Ellen Hopkins. You may have heard of her. She writes young adult fiction in a similar format as you with poetry instead of prose. I would suggest reading "Impulse" which is one of my favorites.

CONTENT AND FORMAT

The speaker appears to be a caring, selfless person. Therefore, she feels wonderful when she helps others such as donate to the victims of hurricane Matthew. It hurts when you think that you have failed but I assure you that you are not. Take it from Bob Ross, the artist "There are no accidents, just little happy mistakes." There are other ways to give a helping hand. For instance, volunteer work opens doors to connections to organizations that help animals, the homeless, and so on. The library is an excellent source that I have used to make even the smallest donation especially with priceless goods such as books, games, crayons, and so on.

PERSONAL CONNECTIONS

I use to feel this way and would get so frustrated that I would give up on it. You strike me as someone who has difficulty with change or wanting to learn something new. This is not a criticism, just an observation because I am similar. Has anyone ever told you that they appreciate what you are doing? If not, let me say that I think that your dedication is wonderful. You really open up to people through your writing.

CLOSING THOUGHTS

Overall, I enjoyed this one because I see more hope. I still see struggle but reality is not an easy task. I trust that you will do just fine if not better. :D

Yours truly,
ria