Living in Hell

the insides are scared 

beaten and bruised

rapped and tortured

you'd think i was in hell

tied down 

blind folded

so much more

the insides are scared 

beaten and bruised

rapped and tortured

you'd think i was in hell

betrayed by all 

lied by them

they need to go 

been hurt to bad

the insides are scared 

beaten and bruised

rapped and tortured

you'd think i was in hell

I have the gun 

so i begun

look what i have done

Reviews

[Shy Joe]

The repeat of the same stanza three times kinda makes it sound like a Catholic prayer. There is pain in most of your writings that I have read. Now it's time to take that pain and turn it into a more creative approach to writing. I went through the same process. I taught myself to take that emotion and to turn it into a creative process. Keep writing and thanks for sharing.

[genocide]

a dark and sad story depressing poem

[Pete]

Fantastic expression of how the pain of being broken feels. The repetition reinforces the feeling. Keep writing.

[WittyWonka]

Living with the memories is hell enough but having experienced it makes hell seem like a playground. Your use of repetition is like a mantra, helping quiet the demons which haunt. Vivid and real, your writing is relatable.

[Rebecca Garber]

I hate people are able to relate to me because my past is horrible

[WittyWonka]

We are not alone, Garber. It's unfortunate but we are a very large community.

[Rebecca Garber]

Thank you so very much it means a lot

[WittyWonka]

You are welcome, and thank you!! :)